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The Virus Bone Marrows Running Starless: A COVID-19 Poem

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The Virus Bone Marrows Running Starless 

 

A sparrow, whirling around

beneath every red oleander bush where poets sit, 

a fire-star, a melody of solemn, 

a silent thing breathes an empty name.

(The world’s luck, an eternal draw.)

Shrieking like that sparrow, 

poking for worms to spit them out from the mud like dying flowers. 

A bouquet of despair 

playing death’s fiddle like that sparrow above me,

or a nun’s raging lust. 

Strangers forge curved figurines of glass through white knuckles. 

Old eyes unstitching as dirt under nails become coal, hidden balled fists. 

 

I am that sparrow. Perching for that dead carcass of worms.

To draw-out that bitten artery full of bone fragments.

(The world’s luck, an eternal draw.)

Hopelessness chained to the beds of youth,

swaying like tall, old bluebells or lonely forget-me-nots 

As each land abandons every ghost

to meet every new and old regret. 

Withering friends and wilted hearts scattered in hot air. 

They write to the only lovers they’ll know,

as the sparrows cluster. 

 

Beneath the waters, they yell-out a battle-cry:

(The world’s luck, an eternal draw.)

Choirs of hopeless indulgence beneath 

the stars where dreamers lay, 

as I travelled with widening feathered wings,

A fear so palpable, unthreading beneath my starless eyes.

 

The stinging of ingrown feathers racing the sun. 

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Salam, Guest IknowIneedtoeditthispoem.

The title [The Virus Bone Marrows Running Starless] is unique and makes you want to read more.

I like the way you gave your poem a title. Many people forget to do that.

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8 hours ago, Hameedeh said:

Salam, Guest IknowIneedtoeditthispoem.

The title [The Virus Bone Marrows Running Starless] is unique and makes you want to read more.

I like the way you gave your poem a title. Many people forget to do that.

Salam,

Thanks for your compliment. I tried to come-up with a title that would go along with the themes of death, contradictions, and juxtaposed images and metaphors.

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12 hours ago, hasanhh said:

The stanzas are a cluster of mixed metaphors.

A poem is a literary effort. Not a regurgitation of hallucinated experiences.

Ok, I respect your opinion, but you couldn’t have been more wrong with the point, which is while I will break down the poem to make it easier to understand. It’s not about a “regurgitation of hallucinated experiences”. Maybe you are unfamiliar with metaphysical poems or poetic language that sounds less straight-forward. Many poems deal with the speaker becoming an object, or an animal, or someone who becomes observant, through repetition of either meter, rhyme, or phrases. These are common literary techniques and devices, that are, of course, less common now with many modern poets. 

Anyway, the break-down and summary:

Sparrows represent death and decay and gothic influences. This is emphasized by the repeated images of dirt, worms, shrieking, and other phrases. The speaker is a poet who is experiencing death of himself and of others. “Dying flowers“ and “bouquet of despair” are metaphorical devices used to signify the speaker’s subjectivity and his/or transformation to observe from eye-level, like a young bird in the sky.  

Juxtaposed images and contradictory metaphors are used to re-enforce the speaker’s objectivity about all that’s unraveling in front of his or her eyes. There is imagery of white knuckles and dirt under nails. One: that work has becoming hurried and people’s demand for more work during COVID has increased as they have lost their jobs, and two: their efforts are not given appropriate compensation, so they are left to “rot”, so to speak. Then the images of life and death through the color white and the color of dirt. Same goes for flowers (something delicate) and chains (something hard)

People have a tough time accepting the virus, so it spreads like clusters of sparrows like dark clouds or warnings from the sparrows of danger. As people come to terms with the virus, they attempt to surrender to the bad times along with the good instead of denying it. Dreamers represent hope, and ingrown feathers are the speaker spreading his/her wings, symbolize renewal and rebirth as the pain of removing him/herself from old thinking and becoming observational stings as he races toward the sun. Starless is metaphor in the title that is mentioned within the sparrow—starless eyes can mean many things, but they are replacing or becoming blood. We all know that veins and arteries carry blood, not stars, and yet, the stars and wings signify hope running in people’s hearts. 

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7 hours ago, Guest Thispoem said:

. Maybe you are unfamiliar with metaphysical poems or poetic language that sounds less straight-forward.

Probably true. l dislike aesthetics.

Yet, worms do not have bones, muchless 'bone fragments.'

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15 minutes ago, hasanhh said:

Probably true. l dislike aesthetics.

Yet, worms do not have bones, muchless 'bone fragments.'

Exactly.

Did my explanation help?  

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8 hours ago, Guest Thispoem said:

Sparrows represent death and decay and gothic influences.

This is the opposite of other writers, such as Dunbar.

23 minutes ago, Guest Thatpoem said:

Did my explanation help?  

No.

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7 minutes ago, hasanhh said:

This is the opposite of other writers, such as Dunbar.

Depending on context, different birds symbolize different things. Sparrows and blackbirds/crows are typically bad omen, bad luck, or gothic symbols, such as in Poe’s work. 

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