An Unsent Poem To Anonymous.

[Servidor]

I found this poem looking through some of my notes today. I have been asked a few times to post a poem on the forum. And so I shall post it. Mark well - it was written when I was a younger man. Before I had developed my solid, imperturbable Roman exterior. It says nothing of me now.

I am forgotten.

Distance has made me no more

to you.

Your happiness keeps you from seeing me

sad.

My sadness keeps me from your happiness

keeps me from mine

you.

I am broken.

I shall not break your happiness.

It is without

me.

It is without even a memory of me.

What do I write?

I am forgotten

And you are happy.

And you are because I am

forgotten.

I suppose the sub-title should be - Dumb broad. Go to art school. See if I care. You're stupid. I don't. Shut up. No you're acting immature. I don't want to hear it! What?

Edited September 20, 2011 by Servidor

[habib e najjaar]

Really well written! If this is what you call "low quality poems" then I wish to see more :lol:

Distance has made me no more

to you.

Your happiness keeps you from seeing me

sad.

My sadness keeps me from your happiness

keeps me from mine

you.

:no: this is a rather sad state of affairs. At least 50% of it sounds self inflicted though :donno:

Mark well - it was written when I was a younger man. Before I had developed my solid, imperturbable Roman exterior. It says nothing of me now.

:lol: :lol: Do you say that aloud to convince yourself of its truth, or to remind you of your resolve to develop the solid, imperturbable Roman exterior?

:lol:

Good piece

[Mustafa]

Bismillah

I remember those times and I am not out of those times completely.

At least 50% of it sounds self inflicted though

You know the desire of that SOLID exterior can make you not ask for things (help). That is my case. The suffering is self inflicted, but then where is the anonymous person to do something about it? I don't know why appearently happy people don't want to share their happiness. Do they expect it to dimish by being shared? Then their exterior is totally not solid. ... It is probably about building bridges. But then the happy person does not try to help with building bridges, since he gains nothing by such an action. Imagine if God pleasure is gained.

I know one thinks it is funny when one is not in hell. But I promise you will dance, in hell, because you are being burned.

Peace

Edit: And thanks for that poem.

[Servidor]

Really well written! If this is what you call "low quality poems" then I wish to see more :lol:

I did not write many more. I always liked reading poetry and pictured to myself becoming a great poet. I had a thousand thoughts for good poems - the last was an introspective epic called Shadows in the basement with the chapters named for family members (except the prologue).

:no: this is a rather sad state of affairs. At least 50% of it sounds self inflicted though :donno:

Says you. By the way, an alternative title is - Woman. Woe! man.

:lol: :lol: Do you say that aloud to convince yourself of its truth, or to remind you of your resolve to develop the solid, imperturbable Roman exterior?

The two are not contradictory. I do not need to convince myself of it's truth because it is true and it is true because of my resolve.

I only wanted to make certain that no one read the poem and ended imagining I still harbour such sentiments.

. . .just got some dirt in my eye.

:lol:

Good piece

If there were more replies like your own I might not suspect it is just you being kind.

...thanks for that poem.

You are most welcome Mustafa.

Edited September 22, 2011 by Servidor

[habib e najjaar]

I did not write many more. I always liked reading poetry and pictured to myself becoming a great poet. I had a thousand thoughts for good poems - the last was an introspective epic called Shadows in the basement with the chapters named for family members (except the prologue).

If there were more replies like your own I might not suspect it is just you being kind.

Hmm.. a thousand thoughts for good poems sounds familiar :Hijabi: and until March this year, I left most of those ideas right there: in my head.

I still hope you will post more. Light stuff, since I don't get deep poetry that easily :squeez:

cheers ^_^

p.s i had started working on the attack on modern cities, then i lost the s[Edited Out] of paper i had scribbled on. lol.

[Shia_Debater]

If there were more replies like your own I might not suspect it is just you being kind.

My honest opinion :

I don't understand some of it such as

My sadness keeps me from your happiness

keeps me from mine

you.

But the Poem is Beautiful, and I'm not just saying that to be kind. Your choice if you believe me :)

Edited September 29, 2011 by Shia_Debater