Fading Conscience

[Ya Aba 3abdillah]

don't laugh :P

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Hi again

...Hi

Back again, been here before

...Yes, daily

Not sure how long it's going to take this time before the black out

...Yes, sometimes hard to judge

Day passed so fast, it was just a blur

...And they're passing faster

But so much to do

...But how much time you think there is

And what of the children?

...They might remember for a while

...Then their children will forget

...And no one will know of the graves

And my fathers?

...They'll pass. All of them

But all this will change

...The change can't be stopped

Each passing day i see them growing

...And such will continue

Is there no way?

...No

But please, just the thought, it hurts

...It's inevitable.

But how about our sorrow, it's too deep

...Only grief lies ahead

And these thoughts, this conscience

...

Hello, will it fade after this body withers?

...Only He has control over it

Yes, but do you actually really believe that?

...Do you?

Will He keep it conscience?

...That is His promise

Will it float? How will it see?

...Time will tell

All i see is distance, dark, silent, lonely

...Do not despair

Where are all those i know, they are missed, their laughs, their presence

...It's said you'll be re-united

But what if they're elsewhere, the longing, the attachment.

...Knowledge of truth will calm you

Curse it all, every bit of it, curse it

...You know you shouldn't

Shut up. Don't want to think about it anymore, when it happens it happens

...Yes, you said the same yesterday and the day before

What ever, switching thoughts now, happy thoughts

...Goodbye

Hmmmm, wonder how that thread on SC is going, oh well, will check tomorrow

[Shia_Debater]

looooool ya aba you are the funniest admin on shiachat :lol:

[Ya Aba 3abdillah]

:dry:

[Ali H Syed]

interesting thoughts youv got :donno: (scared behind my laptop)

[habib e najjaar]

This reminds me of a book I once read entitled :Hello God, its me, are you there? I will have to read it when I am less tired to understand it better.. but I think I like the message.

[Gypsy]

Violent thoughts....

But seems real enough. Get some sleep Brother. You are turning into a poet now. :no:

[Aly ReZa]

SC admins are becoming poet lol

[habib e najjaar]

SC admins are becoming poet lol

-_- bout time too. -_-

[Servidor]

I liked it. You have been thinking about death Ya Aba? If only all consciences were so prudent. Mine does not speak - it is like a sense. It does not speak to me but if I transgress - I know it like a bruise.

You will need to get a better sense for form or structure - but that comes with practise; although the conversational tone has it's value. Worthy thoughts, worthwhile content is more important than knowing the rulebook too well; being a master of grammar with a wide vocabulary and a firm handle on metre. It is useless to be able to write in Alexandrine hexametres and have nothing to say.

You had something to say. That is a good beginning. You shall keep writing poetry? You would not be the first moderator. I remember at least two others who used to post here.

[Blissful]

Wooooooooooooooooo welcome to poetry!

You've made your mark now.... no returns :shaytan:

[Ya Aba 3abdillah]

You have been thinking about death Ya Aba?

How come you're the only one that got it?

That transient place, between slumber and alert, is said by some to be virtual, by others to be closer to reality. Often it's not the most pleasing of states. Particularly for those that contemplate.

[habib e najjaar]

(salam)

My first impression when I read it last night was like the random jumbled up often very deep thoughts that often come to ones mind when they are about to sleep :donno: but that may be because i was thinking of sleeping.

Where are all those i know, they are missed, their laughs, their presence

...It's said you'll be re-united

But what if they're elsewhere, the longing, the attachment.

...Knowledge of truth will calm you

I especially loved this part.. The remembrance of death is a thought that often passes through our thoughts, even at the most 'unexpected' of times, but do we take lessons from it? Or do the lessons we take from death make a lasting change in our lives?

I hope you will write more poetry :D (woohoo! over 60% of SC mods and admins are identifiable by their poetry loving interests :lol: )

EDIT: i just read yours and servidor's take. :lol: ok, so i did not get it fully :D :D

Edited September 9, 2011 by Habib e Najjaar

[Servidor]

That transient place, between slumber and alert, is said by some to be virtual, by others to be closer to reality. Often it's not the most pleasing of states. Particularly for those that contemplate.

I believe I understand this as well. It is most likely to occur barely after first light - in the grey of the morning, whether you have only woken just before or have stayed awake until then. I have heard it called the unworldly hour. That part of the day where few men are awake and fewer are working or going places; the streets are empty; even the robbers are in blankets. If you are fully awake before they get up and the noise rises and they start buying and selling?

Whether it pleases or not turns upon what you were considering or saw.

I should have written more on the content of your poem as well. You were not thinking solely of death in itself - but of being remembered or forgotten. Of change. Whether the soul of man survives it and ascends. Whether it is true that you shall see those who have gone before you. These are ancient questions. They never become old. They are original because almost every thoughtful man asks them for himself and because there is no one who is above them. It bears upon all. All men die. It is of note that your conscience answers you. You are asking. Usually it would be some part of your mind doubting and you answering it.

As well - you have an eye for a good turn of phrase.

And what of the children?

...They might remember for a while

...Then their children will forget

will it fade after this body withers?

...Only He has control over it

Yes, but do you actually really believe that?

...Do you?

Will it float? How will it see?

...Time will tell

Very promising.

Edited September 9, 2011 by Servidor

[Ya Aba 3abdillah]

^ :)

Thought sharing might help others, since we'll realize that all human consciences will be in this together in the end, even though each conscience will be judged solely.