Brainwashed

[Guest Zahratul_Islam]

All the promises I made I could not keep

For I was smaller than my own words

A beautiful woven

masterfully crafted

Lie

But he was so unaware, so oblivious

And so he put all his trust in me

All the bitterness I awakened in him!

This bitterness enabled me to steal

The happiness of

the little things

His cynicism gave me purpose

Allowed me to take all of life‘s joyful moments

and hide them away forever

And I relished in this power

He went to sleep angry

and awoke enraged

I gave him this anger

To replace solace

And knowing this I paid no heed

He was weak before my assurances

Of heaven and of eternal salvation

He was like a child

I crafted his innocent dreams

And then used my merciless hands

To uproot them

To shatter him

All the confusion that I inspired

For I was the source of everything

I could taking it away willingly

Knowingly and happily

Confident in my control

I grew close to him

Letting him open me

Assured he could do me no harm

He was insignificant

So I let my curiosity get the best of me

For I too wanted to be inspired

And when I grew too close to him

When I let him overcome me

I nourished him

He grew from my love

He thrived on my words

And so he began to question me

And I followed his lead

Playing the role of the child

of the mother

All at once

All so carefree, so recklessly

To pacify myself when he chastised me

And when he broke my heart

When he shattered everything

He had a thousand reasons

All numbing me

Silencing me

Accusing me

His words were enveloping me

And my lies were suffocating me

And I was broken

Unable to say a word

He had betrayed me

And suddenly he did not seem so small to me

Edited October 23, 2009 by Zahratul_Islam

[Shia & Proud]

Wow. :mellow:

Very deep, I liked the flow of it. My vote for 2009.

Edited October 23, 2009 by Shia & Proud

[Bonafide Hustler]

That is really a nice piece. What inspired you to write this? Is this experience, observation or just imagination?

[SO SOLID SHIA]

Is this about religion brainwashing people? Are you leaving Islam??

It was a good read

well done

[Imani]

That was excellent!! Wow!

Please tell us what inspired you. Please explain more about the title Brainwashed.

[Marbles]

Confident in my control

I grew close to him

Letting him open me

Assured he could do me no harm

He was insignificant

So I let my curiosity get the best of me

For I too wanted to be inspired

And when I grew too close to him

When I let him overcome me

I nourished him

He grew from my love

He thrived on my words

And so he began to question me

Excellent. A beautifully crafted piece of art. A good piece of poetry. Kudos.

[thats me titch]

This poem is simply beautiful. Powerfully written.. amazing.

[Guest Zahratul_Islam]

Thanks everyone! I really appreciate the commentary. I didn't get any criticisms and yet its rated at -4 :unsure:

Cowards I say!! Show yourselves and post your criticisms! I would love any suggestions on how to improve.. though I make no promises :angel:

[yafatimaalzahra]

Wow, lovely. I just hope your not the one who was lying and was left with a broken heart. :squeez: :P

I'd love to read more of your poetry

[Spriglief]

I did not know who was speaking, the devil, a woman toying with a man, yet, this is more a strenght then a weakness I would say.

I've never noticed the voting feature and have never voted until today!

[Guest Zahratul_Islam]

I did not know who was speaking, the devil, a woman toying with a man, yet, this is more a strenght then a weakness I would say.

I've never noticed the voting feature and have never voted until today!

I didn't want to answer that question for a reason.

I am honored to be your first vote :blush:

[Nadir]

I LOVE this poem.

[Guest Zahratul_Islam]

I LOVE this poem.

I love all of your poems :blush:

[Calm]

I usually read every poem posted here but I missed this one-It must have been posted when I was a little away. Anyways, just wanted to tell you Zahraa, your piece is beautiful , deep and mostly meaningful. I liked it..Liked the message I gathered from it.

I didn't know you write poetry?...Keep them coming!

[Gypsy]

(salam)

Thanks for bumping this up. This was a very interesting poem.

The portion below is the most interesting part of the poetry. Also very self revealing.

All the confusion that I inspired

For I was the source of everything

I could taking it away willingly

Knowingly and happily

Confident in my control

I grew close to him

Letting him open me

Assured he could do me no harm

He was insignificant

So I let my curiosity get the best of me

For I too wanted to be inspired

[w.b.]

this poem made me cry... :'(

very well written