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sharib

Ishq mein hai ajab ek suroor

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Salam,

Aasaan lafzon mein ashaar kahne ka aur padhne ka apnaa mazaa hai.

Mulahiza Farmain:

Ek kalee sa khila mera man,

AAj khushion kee aisee chubhan,

Uske Aansoo mere hain nayan

Isko kahte hain deewanapan

Ishq mein hai ajab ek suroor

dil ko rakhta hai har dam magan

Jhooth aasaan nahin bolna

hoti hai atma mein mein ghutan

Sab bhala hai agar tum bhale

Tum na rakhna kisee se jalan

Phool, Khushboo ,pawan Titliyaan

yeh mitaat-e hain mery thakan

Ek bachhe kee sadah hansi

jaise suraj kee pahlee kiran

Meri Bhasha saral, sur madhur

phir na kyoon mujh mein ho baankpan

Husn Qudrat ka shahkar hai

har haseen shai ko mera naman

Tum ko soncha to aisa laga

har taraf hai chaman hee chaman

Tera Sharib jo mun saaf hai

Achche lagt-e hain tere kathan.

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Salam,

Aasaan lafzon mein ashaar kahne ka aur padhne ka apnaa mazaa hai.

Mulahiza Farmain:

Ek kalee sa khila mera man,

AAj khushion kee aisee chubhan,

Uske Aansoo mere hain nayan

Isko kahte hain deewanapan

Ishq mein hai ajab ek suroor

dil ko rakhta hai har dam magan

Jhooth aasaan nahin bolna

hoti hai atma mein mein ghutan

Sab bhala hai agar tum bhale

Tum na rakhna kisee se jalan

Phool, Khushboo ,pawan Titliyaan

yeh mitaat-e hain mery thakan

Ek bachhe kee sadah hansi

jaise suraj kee pahlee kiran

Meri Bhasha saral, sur madhur

phir na kyoon mujh mein ho baankpan

Husn Qudrat ka shahkar hai

har haseen shai ko mera naman

Tum ko soncha to aisa laga

har taraf hai chaman hee chaman

Tera Sharib jo mun saaf hai

Achche lagt-e hain tere kathan.

salam sharib,

bohat khoob, bohat khoob sharib.

dil pe udasi ki jo koher thee aap ka kalam pertay hi kaheen ghaib ho gayee. nihayat sherren o shaghufta kalam hai ye aap ka.

dil garden garden ho gaya. khush hum hoi , sawab aap ko jai ga!!!

itni buri deal bhi nahii ye

do lafz, shayed main theek say per nahi pa rahi, ye naman samajh nahi aa raha hai!!-------------------------aur dosra KATHAN,----------as in KATHA------------as in bayan ya kahani??

bhi bohat hi lutf aya.

aap ki zameen per ek mushkil hum nay bhi bayan ki thee, jo kay aap kay kalam say motssir ho kar wojood main ayee thee. ab hamary mushkil ye hai, k agar aap hi kuch nahi farmaingay es mushkil per tu mushkil tu mushkil hi rahi na!!

aap ki raiye ka intezar rehay ga.

ws

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salam sharib,

bohat khoob, bohat khoob sharib.

dil pe udasi ki jo koher thee aap ka kalam pertay hi kaheen ghaib ho gayee. nihayat sherren o shaghufta kalam hai ye aap ka.

dil garden garden ho gaya. khush hum hoi , sawab aap ko jai ga!!!

itni buri deal bhi nahii ye

do lafz, shayed main theek say per nahi pa rahi, ye naman samajh nahi aa raha hai!!-------------------------aur dosra KATHAN,----------as in KATHA------------as in bayan ya kahani??

bhi bohat hi lutf aya.

aap ki zameen per ek mushkil hum nay bhi bayan ki thee, jo kay aap kay kalam say motssir ho kar wojood main ayee thee. ab hamary mushkil ye hai, k agar aap hi kuch nahi farmaingay es mushkil per tu mushkil tu mushkil hi rahi na!!

aap ki raiye ka intezar rehay ga.

ws

Salam ,

Enayaton ka shukria.

AAP KEE "MUSHKIL" PER Maien apnee rai zaroor doonga... AGLE KHAT MEIN.

Aap ne jo alfaaz daryaft kiye aur kuch aur lafz bhee likh raha hoon: dosroon ke liye.

[bhasha =ZUBAAN, LANGUAGE]

[bankpaan= The aura of slight ego, ghroor-e musbat]

[Naman= TO BOW DOWN IN RESPECT]

[Kathan = The statements ]

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''Ek bachhe kee sadah hansi

jaise suraj kee pahlee kiran''

wah sharib saheb bohat umda kalam...kya khoob bahao hei

dad pesh hei

naqshipa , aap ka bahot shukria .

EK GUZARISH, kya aap ise urdu rasmul khat mein convert kar sakte hain

WASSALAM

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Salam ,

Enayaton ka shukria.

AAP KEE "MUSHKIL" PER Maien apnee rai zaroor doonga... AGLE KHAT MEIN.

Aap ne jo alfaaz daryaft kiye aur kuch aur lafz bhee likh raha hoon: dosroon ke liye.

[bhasha =ZUBAAN, LANGUAGE]

[bankpaan= The aura of slight ego, ghroor-e musbat]

[Naman= TO BOW DOWN IN RESPECT]

[Kathan = The statements ]

salam,

KATHAN , ye urdu lafz nahi shayed hindi hai?

shair kay maeenay tu samajh main aa rehay thay NAMAN kay sath bhi, laikin main soch rahi thee k SALAM matlab hoga eska. laikin ye nahi farmaya aap nay k ye hindi hai ya farsi?

shukria

ws

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Tamam raat diye paani mein jalata raha

Woh yaad aati rahi mein usay bhulata raha

Woh meri nazam ka koi udaas misra tha

Mein jis ko wehshat-e-sehra mein gungunata raha

Na koi pehlay tha tujh se na baad mein aaya

Yeh zindagi mujhay aur mein usay aazmata raha

-----------------------------------------------------

Udaas aankh mein shab ka khumaar dekha hey

Kay pehli bar usay bey-karaar dekha hey

Jisay khabar he na hoti thi meray aaney ki

Usi ki aankh mein ab intezaar dekha hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Aey dost jab bhi tu udaas ho ga

Mera khayal hamesha teray paas ho ga

Dil ki gehraiyon se jab bhi karo gey yaad

Tumhein meray kareeb honay ka ehsaas ho ga

-----------------------------------------------------

Zindagi udaas honay ka naam nahi

Dosti sirf paas honay ka naam nahi

Agar tum door reh ker bhi humein yaad karo

Is se bara hamaray liye koi INAM nahi

-----------------------------------------------------

Hum har roz udaas hotay hain aur shaam guzar jati hey

Kisi roz shaam udaas hogi aur hum guzar jaen gey

-----------------------------------------------------

Pareshan hey dil aur zindagi udaas bhi

Tanha hoon mein aur sab kuch meray paas bhi

Lagta hey mein hoon per mein hoon bhi nahi

Sab kuch mila bhi aisey jesay kuch mila bhi nahi

-----------------------------------------------------

Mujhay udaas dekh ker zamanay ne sawal kiya

Woh kon hey jis ne tera yeh haal kiya

Mein ne kaha mohabbat hey jo meri un kay sath hey

Woh huway mujh se khafa bas itni si baat hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Ghataon se aaj chand sharmaya hey

Fizaon mein aaj naya rang chaya hey

Aap hain kay ab tak udaas bethay hain

Ab tou muskurain SMS hamara aaya hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Jo na huwa kabhi woh ek raat ho gaya

Chand ko sooraj se pyar ho gaya

Chand nikla talash mein aur kho gaya

Chand kay jatay hi aasman udaas ho gaya

Sooraj tou jalta hi raha intezar mein aur aag ho gaya

Sooraj ki khata se chand kay liye andhera ho gaya

Chand ne ki beywafai aur taron kay sath ho gaya

Sila mila kuch is tarah dono per girhan ho gaya

Kertay rahay beyrukhi hamesha kay liye

Ek ban gaya din aur dosra raat ho gaya

-----------------------------------------------------

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sharib,

aap say bhi ek guzarish hai. ey ghazal aapni pori sadgee kay sath bohat sheeren hai. agar aap bura na maniye, tu es main say wo teen shair nikal dein jo ghazal kay mood say alag hain, aur phir naqshipa say guzarish karin k es takhaiyul ko graphics main qaid kar dein, ghazal dekhtay hain phir kaisi lagteei hai!!!

ws

Edited by khakay batool

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Tamam raat diye paani mein jalata raha

Woh yaad aati rahi mein usay bhulata raha

Woh meri nazam ka koi udaas misra tha

Mein jis ko wehshat-e-sehra mein gungunata raha

Na koi pehlay tha tujh se na baad mein aaya

Yeh zindagi mujhay aur mein usay aazmata raha

-----------------------------------------------------

Udaas aankh mein shab ka khumaar dekha hey

Kay pehli bar usay bey-karaar dekha hey

Jisay khabar he na hoti thi meray aaney ki

Usi ki aankh mein ab intezaar dekha hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Aey dost jab bhi tu udaas ho ga

Mera khayal hamesha teray paas ho ga

Dil ki gehraiyon se jab bhi karo gey yaad

Tumhein meray kareeb honay ka ehsaas ho ga

-----------------------------------------------------

Zindagi udaas honay ka naam nahi

Dosti sirf paas honay ka naam nahi

Agar tum door reh ker bhi humein yaad karo

Is se bara hamaray liye koi INAM nahi

-----------------------------------------------------

Hum har roz udaas hotay hain aur shaam guzar jati hey

Kisi roz shaam udaas hogi aur hum guzar jaen gey

-----------------------------------------------------

Pareshan hey dil aur zindagi udaas bhi

Tanha hoon mein aur sab kuch meray paas bhi

Lagta hey mein hoon per mein hoon bhi nahi

Sab kuch mila bhi aisey jesay kuch mila bhi nahi

-----------------------------------------------------

Mujhay udaas dekh ker zamanay ne sawal kiya

Woh kon hey jis ne tera yeh haal kiya

Mein ne kaha mohabbat hey jo meri un kay sath hey

Woh huway mujh se khafa bas itni si baat hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Ghataon se aaj chand sharmaya hey

Fizaon mein aaj naya rang chaya hey

Aap hain kay ab tak udaas bethay hain

Ab tou muskurain SMS hamara aaya hey

-----------------------------------------------------

Jo na huwa kabhi woh ek raat ho gaya

Chand ko sooraj se pyar ho gaya

Chand nikla talash mein aur kho gaya

Chand kay jatay hi aasman udaas ho gaya

Sooraj tou jalta hi raha intezar mein aur aag ho gaya

Sooraj ki khata se chand kay liye andhera ho gaya

Chand ne ki beywafai aur taron kay sath ho gaya

Sila mila kuch is tarah dono per girhan ho gaya

Kertay rahay beyrukhi hamesha kay liye

Ek ban gaya din aur dosra raat ho gaya

-----------------------------------------------------

bhi aap ka intekhab boht acha hota hai, laikin, ye tu kisi ki aapni kavish o ghazal ki bat ho rahi hai. kuch tu himmat afzai kiji aap bhi kisi ki. maafi chahti hon, khamosh nahi raha gaya!!!! :)

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I dont like Shairi (lugu batain) at all, but, however, posted here for you urdu guys.

phir tu aap ki maufi hai!!!(i think!!!)

acha ab ye bhi batatay chalye k AHMAD FARAZ pe jo mazahiya thread shoroo ki aap nay, tu ye silsila akhir shoro kaisay hova FARAZ KAY BAD??

hum urdu guys ka khyal rakhnay ka dili shukria.

ws

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phir tu aap ki maufi hai!!!(i think!!!)

acha ab ye bhi batatay chalye k AHMAD FARAZ pe jo mazahiya thread shoroo ki aap nay, tu ye silsila akhir shoro kaisay hova FARAZ KAY BAD??

hum urdu guys ka khyal rakhnay ka dili shukria.

ws

I have lots of comedy shairi of Faraz, so I post here, nothing else.

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sharib,

aap say bhi ek guzarish hai. ey ghazal aapni pori sadgee kay sath bohat sheeren hai. agar aap bura na maniye, tu es main say wo teen shair nikal dein jo ghazal kay mood say alag hain, aur phir naqshipa say guzarish karin k es takhaiyul ko graphics main qaid kar dein, ghazal dekhtay hain phir kaisi lagteei hai!!!

ws

KB , aap ke dono khatoot ka jawab ek jagah de raha hun.

Naman aur Kathan asl mein Sanskrit origin ke hain aur Hindi mein aam faham hain. Urdu dohon mein Hindi ke alfaaz kasrat se paye jaate hain....isliye nagawaar nahin hona chaihey.

Rah gaya yeh ke : aap kee rai ahm hai , bura man-ne ka sawal nahin.....Reaction is very important to me...

Woh kaun se teen sher , nishaandehi karien ...

Doosre yeh arz karna chahoonga ke generally Ghazal topical nahin hotee, Ghazal ka daman bahot wasee-a hota hai , pahle sher mein koee mazmun aur doosre mein koee aur hee, lehaza mukhtalif mood ke ashaar ek ghazal mein ho sakte hain.....

Maein apko counter nahin kar raha hun, apnee baat kah raha hoon jis par aap ke imaandaarana rai ke muntazir hun.

Ap kee rai apne jagah theek hai aur hifazat se rakhee huee hai ...aap ke jawab ke baad phir ghaur karoonga.

wassalam

Yahee haal dohon ka hai....

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KB , aap ke dono khatoot ka jawab ek jagah de raha hun.

Naman aur Kathan asl mein Sanskrit origin ke hain aur Hindi mein aam faham hain. Urdu dohon mein Hindi ke alfaaz kasrat se paye jaate hain....isliye nagawaar nahin hona chaihey.

Rah gaya yeh ke : aap kee rai ahm hai , bura man-ne ka sawal nahin.....Reaction is very important to me...

Woh kaun se teen sher , nishaandehi karien ...

Doosre yeh arz karna chahoonga ke generally Ghazal topical nahin hotee, Ghazal ka daman bahot wasee-a hota hai , pahle sher mein koee mazmun aur doosre mein koee aur hee, lehaza mukhtalif mood ke ashaar ek ghazal mein ho sakte hain.....

Maein apko counter nahin kar raha hun, apnee baat kah raha hoon jis par aap ke imaandaarana rai ke muntazir hun.

Ap kee rai apne jagah theek hai aur hifazat se rakhee huee hai ...aap ke jawab ke baad phir ghaur karoonga.

wassalam

thats it,

hamain ye bolna mehanga pernay laga hai!!

ye taussor kahan say laaye aap kay ye do masoom say words ya inka istemaal hamain nagawar guzra????

lahola------------waqaira

bhi, hum tu sirf aapni maloomat theek kar rehay thay. aap say seekhtay aain hain aur seekhna chah rehay thay. agar

aap ko garan khatir hova tu ayenda samajh aye ya na ayai, laikin hum khamosh rehain gay!!!!!!!!!

sharib, aap nay bikul sahi farmaya k aam toor per ghazal ka ek hi topic nahi hota. main khud intehai ishqiya ghazal main

ek do ashaar ehlaibait per keh jati hon. har shair aapni jagha mukammal bhi hota hai aur ghazal ek topic per bhi ho sakti

hai.. aap bilkul baja farma rehain hain. main es say kaisay ikhtilaf rakh saktee hon bhala!!

hamara qatt-an koi eshara es taraf nahi tha.

hum sirf ye kehna chah rahay thay k ye ghazal, 'kind of' romantic hai, aur

hamain bohat achee lgee thee, hamian shair ka ye andaz-e- bayan acha laga tha, aur bas. ye sab likhtay howay, hamary samajh main aya k hamary

guzarish hamary hi liay theek na thee, k hum khud es ghazal ko, sirf aapnay tasuar say dekhna chahtay hain!!!! ---------------------aur hona bhi yehi chaheye

hai.

hum apni guzarish, intehaaaaaaaaaaaaaai mazrat kay sath, wapas laitay hain.

ab aisa kuch na kiji ga--------------------------------- k hamari apni takhleeq ulhaj jai gee.

dilli mazrat agar kuch nagawar guzar ho aur teh-e-dil say shukria k aap kay sawal per hamain itni piyaree bat khud samajh aagaye!!!

lagta hai hamary sitary waqaira gardish main hain, hum soch rehain hain k taliban join kar lain!!!

kam az kam SHAHEED TU KEHLAIN GAY :yaali:

Edited by khakay batool

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KB, tasleemat ,

AAp ne pahle jo kaha tha woh bahot achcha tha, aap kee apnee rai thee. Hamein bahot khushee hoee.

Maazrat na keejiye, aap ne baad mein jo kaha wo bhee theek hai siway mazraat ke.

Agar baat dil khol ke na ho ,to phir guftugu ka faidah kya.

Hamein normallly in baton ka bura nahin lagata.....aap kee queematee rai zaroori hai , aindah bhee inayaat kartee rahin.

Waise ghaal kee tareef ka mazeed shukria.

Wassalam

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naqshipa , aap ka bahot shukria .

EK GUZARISH, kya aap ise urdu rasmul khat mein convert kar sakte hain

WASSALAM

aap ke hukm ki tameel mein zara si takheer ho gai jis ke liye mazrat chahta hon..darasl shehr se bahar tha guzishta dinon so majboor tha

aap ke kalam ko urdu rasmaulkhat mein likh to laya hon......agar imla ki koi ghalati ho ya deegar koi tabdeel chahate hoon to bejhijhak bataiye ga

ye lijiye link...isye apni ghazal ke sath he ooper de dijiye..

http://img149.imageshack.us/img149/5655/sharibrc8.jpg

wsalam

naqshipa

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aap ke hukm ki tameel mein zara si takheer ho gai jis ke liye mazrat chahta hon..darasl shehr se bahar tha guzishta dinon so majboor tha

aap ke kalam ko urdu rasmaulkhat mein likh to laya hon......agar imla ki koi ghalati ho ya deegar koi tabdeel chahate hoon to bejhijhak bataiye ga

ye lijiye link...isye apni ghazal ke sath he ooper de dijiye..

http://img149.imageshack.us/img149/5655/sharibrc8.jpg

wsalam

naqshipa

Naqshipa

bahot shukria:

Meri urdu achchi nahin hai , phir bhee meri maloomat ke hisaab se imle kee koi ghalti nahin magar ek sher mein

kitabaat ka kamaal ho gaya ......aap khud bhee lutf andoz honge:

Asl sher yun thaa

"tera Sharib jo man saaf hai

Achche lagte hain tere kathan"

Lafz hai man =mun...

conscience

Aap kee tahreer mein woh munh= face/ zuban ho gaya.

Zara use tabdeel kar dein.

Aur ek baat ......

satvein sher mein....

" meri bhasha saral, sur madhur"

App kee tahree mein sur ke jagah aur ho gaya hai .....aur woh bhee mazun hai.

Magar chunkee main khush-gulu hun lehaza...sur ko baquee rakihye....

BAHOT BAHOT shukria Naqshipa.....

wassalam

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Naqshipa

bahot shukria:

Meri urdu achchi nahin hai , phir bhee meri maloomat ke hisaab se imle kee koi ghalti nahin magar ek sher mein

kitabaat ka kamaal ho gaya ......aap khud bhee lutf andoz honge:

Asl sher yun thaa

"tera Sharib jo man saaf hai

Achche lagte hain tere kathan"

Lafz hai man =mun...

conscience

Aap kee tahreer mein woh munh= face/ zuban ho gaya.

Zara use tabdeel kar dein.

Aur ek baat ......

satvein sher mein....

" meri bhasha saral, sur madhur"

App kee tahree mein sur ke jagah aur ho gaya hai .....aur woh bhee mazun hai.

Magar chunkee main khush-gulu hun lehaza...sur ko baquee rakihye....

BAHOT BAHOT shukria Naqshipa.....

wassalam

in dilchasp ghalatiyon ki mazrat chahta hon..

yeh lijiye naya link..

http://img244.imageshack.us/img244/1279/sharibxm2.jpg

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Salam,

Aasaan lafzon mein ashaar kahne ka aur padhne ka apnaa mazaa hai.

Mulahiza Farmain:

Ek kalee sa khila mera man,

AAj khushion kee aisee chubhan,

Uske Aansoo mere hain nayan

Isko kahte hain deewanapan

Ishq mein hai ajab ek suroor

dil ko rakhta hai har dam magan

Jhooth aasaan nahin bolna

hoti hai atma mein mein ghutan

Sab bhala hai agar tum bhale

Tum na rakhna kisee se jalan

Phool, Khushboo ,pawan Titliyaan

yeh mitaat-e hain mery thakan

Ek bachhe kee sadah hansi

jaise suraj kee pahlee kiran

Meri Bhasha saral, sur madhur

phir na kyoon mujh mein ho baankpan

Husn Qudrat ka shahkar hai

har haseen shai ko mera naman

Tum ko soncha to aisa laga

har taraf hai chaman hee chaman

Tera Sharib jo mun saaf hai

Achche lagt-e hain tere kathan.

Urdu transcript can be seen in this link as given by Naqshipa:

http://img244.imageshack.us/img244/1279/sharibxm2.jpg.

Shukria.

in dilchasp ghalatiyon ki mazrat chahta hon..

yeh lijiye naya link..

http://img244.imageshack.us/img244/1279/sharibxm2.jpg

bohot bahot shukria naqshipa....

Urdu rasmulkhat kee baat hee aur hai....

Ghaltiyaan waquaee mazey ke theein...

wassalam

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Urdu transcript can be seen in this link as given by Naqshipa

bohot bahot shukria naqshipa....

Urdu rasmulkhat kee baat hee aur hai....

Ghaltiyaan waquaee mazey ke theein...

wassalam

salam,

ap dono ko mubarki!!!

ghazal khud bohat umda thee, urdu main per kar ziyada samajh main aarahi hai!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

job well done!

ws

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I dont like Shairi (lugu batain) at all, but, however, posted here for you urdu guys.

dont curse urdu guys, dont u know i am one of them ?

Bakray ne kaha bakri se aey jan-e-aziz

Ab kay bichray tou shayad kababon mein milay

thora bhool gaeay aap :squeez:

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