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naqshipa

Wo shkhs hmara na raha...ek aor ghazal

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doston ki nazr ye tehrir bhi...

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koi manzil na rahi koi kinara na raha

moaj bertay hi safina bhi hamara na raha

leave it to naqshipa, k wo jis khobsorti say har jazba-e-dil ko qalam band kartay hain, har kisi kay bas ki bat nahi!

bohat hi aAla ghazal naqshipa............amad jari rehna chahiye hai.

waisy.........tu hum kai shuaAra ko jantay hain. samajh nahi aa raha hai k ye kis ka andaz hai. :)

kion k ap hargiz koi ITEFAQIYA(hamari tarhan) shaiir nahi hain.

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koi manzil na rahi koi kinara na raha

moaj bertay hi safina bhi hamara na raha

leave it to naqshipa, k wo jis khobsorti say har jazba-e-dil ko qalam band kartay hain, har kisi kay bas ki bat nahi!

bohat hi aAla ghazal naqshipa............amad jari rehna chahiye hai.

Nawazish, karam, shukrya , mehrbani :)

waisy.........tu hum kai shuaAra ko jantay hain. samajh nahi aa raha hai k ye kis ka andaz hai.

kion k ap hargiz koi ITEFAQIYA(hamari tarhan) shaiir nahi hain.

mera nam jan kar ke tumhe kya mile ga akhir

hei yehi mra taaruf, main kisi ka naqshipa hon

kal ek dost ne yhan is ghzal per tabsre mei boht khul kr imandari se apne ehsasat ko rqam kia tha, jis se zati tor pr mujhe koi shikayt hei na gila. lekin unhon ne khud he use delete kra mnasib smjha shyed, marzi iun ki

kal rat us tehrir ko parh k bohat der mere dil o dimagh ki ajeb si kefiat hoi...aor phri ek takhliq hoi jo pesh krne ja raha hon...peshgi mazrat k sath agr kisi ko koch hi bura lage...

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Nawazish, karam, shukrya , mehrbani :)

mera nam jan kar ke tumhe kya mile ga akhir

hei yehi mra taaruf, main kisi ka naqshipa hon

kal ek dost ne yhan is ghzal per tabsre mei boht khul kr imandari se apne ehsasat ko rqam kia tha, jis se zati tor pr mujhe koi shikayt hei na gila. lekin unhon ne khud he use delete kra mnasib smjha shyed, marzi iun ki

kal rat us tehrir ko parh k bohat der mere dil o dimagh ki ajeb si kefiat hoi...aor phri ek takhliq hoi jo pesh krne ja raha hon...peshgi mazrat k sath agr kisi ko koch hi bura lage...

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even i read it. it was very sad!

i did not want to say any thing about it but now i must.

ap ka kalam hargiz talkh nahi hai kaheen say bhi. balkay os main es "majbori ki judaai" ki tlakh haqeeqat ka aiteraf hai, jo shaaiir ko sehni per rahi hai. apni tanhaai ki shikayat , es kay siwa kuch naahi kay k jo sath raha wo ek khobsorat, na bholany wala, hameshan yad rehanay wala taweel, sath tha!!!!

ap kay mehboob ki "berukhi" ,bewafaai, shayed abhi clear nahi hoi zamanay per.

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Naqsh e paa aur unki azeez dost se mein bauhat mazrat chahte hon ke unko mera yahan javab post karna aur phir usko delete kar dena sakht nagavaar bhi guzra aur dukh bhi hoa

Mein haqeeqatan maazratkhaah hon , wajhuhaat eik se zayad theen jo us javab ko delete karna para na chahte hoay bhi aur mujhe sab se barh ke khushi hie naqsh e pa ke ap ne usko parh lya tha , bas shayed yehe kafe bhi tha magar apki ye filbadeeh takhleeq batla rahe hei ke apka dil bbauahat dukh gaya us javab se ...waise bhi mein dil dukhanae mein ap EXPERT ho chuki hon , akcar ye gunaah khulum khulla sarzad ho jata hei kiya kaha jaye meri shayed fitrat hee aisi hei,

bas apki tehreron pe eik baat kehtee chalon baat ko khatam karte hoay ke mera eik bauahat azeez kuch jungli sa dost hoa karta tha,uska dil buahat dukh jata to vo buahat talkh ho jata tha , aur uska dukh jitna barhta vo utna hee talkh ho jata aur uski ye baat bari piyare laga kartee mujhe

.........ab to sab khawb o khayal hoa ......

kher

apki tehreer mein pehlee ghazal parhne se hee mujhe ushee dost ka aks dikh raha hai tabhi mein baarbaar apki tehreer pe arahe hon warna sach ye ke ab kaheen koi tabsara karne ki sakat nahi ke apne ap pe eitamaad khatam ho chuka hai

shayed gheriradi taur pe apki tehreer mein jo gila tha vo najane kyun dil bauhat dukha gaya aur mein vo sab likh gayee tabsare ke taur pe .......

warna apka dard apki kasak apki khalish uff vo tamaam iztarab vo gehrayee .............Naqshe pa ap eik ajnabi shayer hein mere lye jisko mehaz parhne akcar yahan anae lagee hon warna ab internet pe na koi dost raha na isko access karte hon magar apki tehreerain eik magnat ki tarha kheench latee hein

mera hargiz inko mehaz talkh keh dena ka maqsad na tha magar shayed mein vo sab bhi likh gayee jo dil mein kaheen daba tha arse se aur apne siwa ab koi raha bhi nahi ke jis se apna haal e dil keh sun sakun so vo khamoshi apki tehreeron ne tor daalee aur kuch aisi baatain bhi keh gayee jo shayed directly apki tehreer se nahi balke mere dilke naacuron se related theen

aur kya kahon ke dil bauhat udas ho ke reh gaya

shayed mein is laiq rahee nahi na dil na dimagh ke kaheen kuch keh sakun

jab kuch kehte hon dil ko dukha dete hon ya vo keh jate hon jo mere hee haq mein ac ha nahi hota

hosake to mujhe maaf kar dijiye ga agar apka dil anjanae mein dukha diya ho

apki tamaam tehreron ki tarha apki ye akhri ghazal bhi jo black mein likhee hei ap ne buahat umda hai ,bari umdagi se ap apni baat samjhtae hein

wafa bewafayee jhoot sach haar jeet.........................ye sab lafz ......................in ke agaye bhi buahat kuch hoa karta hai reh e wafa mein ...............

.................apka dard raiygaan nahi hazrat , apki tehreeron mein usko mehsus kiya hai mein ne , apne dilse mehsus kiya hai ..........ho sake to yaqeen kijiye ga aur dil se vo khalish mita dijiye ga ke bas talkhi mehsus kee ap ki tehreron mein .....

bas itna hee ........

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Naqsh e paa aur unki azeez dost se mein bauhat mazrat chahte hon ke unko mera yahan javab post karna aur phir usko delete kar dena sakht nagavaar bhi guzra aur dukh bhi hoa

Mein haqeeqatan maazratkhaah hon , wajhuhaat eik se zayad theen jo us javab ko delete karna para na chahte hoay bhi aur mujhe sab se barh ke khushi hie naqsh e pa ke ap ne usko parh lya tha , bas shayed yehe kafe bhi tha magar apki ye filbadeeh takhleeq batla rahe hei ke apka dil bbauahat dukh gaya us javab se ...waise bhi mein dil dukhanae mein ap EXPERT ho chuki hon , akcar ye gunaah khulum khulla sarzad ho jata hei kiya kaha jaye meri shayed fitrat hee aisi hei,

bas apki tehreron pe eik baat kehtee chalon baat ko khatam karte hoay ke mera eik bauahat azeez kuch jungli sa dost hoa karta tha,uska dil buahat dukh jata to vo buahat talkh ho jata tha , aur uska dukh jitna barhta vo utna hee talkh ho jata aur uski ye baat bari piyare laga kartee mujhe

.........ab to sab khawb o khayal hoa ......

kher

apki tehreer mein pehlee ghazal parhne se hee mujhe ushee dost ka aks dikh raha hai tabhi mein baarbaar apki tehreer pe arahe hon warna sach ye ke ab kaheen koi tabsara karne ki sakat nahi ke apne ap pe eitamaad khatam ho chuka hai

shayed gheriradi taur pe apki tehreer mein jo gila tha vo najane kyun dil bauhat dukha gaya aur mein vo sab likh gayee tabsare ke taur pe .......

warna apka dard apki kasak apki khalish uff vo tamaam iztarab vo gehrayee .............Naqshe pa ap eik ajnabi shayer hein mere lye jisko mehaz parhne akcar yahan anae lagee hon warna ab internet pe na koi dost raha na isko access karte hon magar apki tehreerain eik magnat ki tarha kheench latee hein

mera hargiz inko mehaz talkh keh dena ka maqsad na tha magar shayed mein vo sab bhi likh gayee jo dil mein kaheen daba tha arse se aur apne siwa ab koi raha bhi nahi ke jis se apna haal e dil keh sun sakun so vo khamoshi apki tehreeron ne tor daalee aur kuch aisi baatain bhi keh gayee jo shayed directly apki tehreer se nahi balke mere dilke naacuron se related theen

aur kya kahon ke dil bauhat udas ho ke reh gaya

shayed mein is laiq rahee nahi na dil na dimagh ke kaheen kuch keh sakun

jab kuch kehte hon dil ko dukha dete hon ya vo keh jate hon jo mere hee haq mein ac ha nahi hota

hosake to mujhe maaf kar dijiye ga agar apka dil anjanae mein dukha diya ho

apki tamaam tehreron ki tarha apki ye akhri ghazal bhi jo black mein likhee hei ap ne buahat umda hai ,bari umdagi se ap apni baat samjhtae hein

wafa bewafayee jhoot sach haar jeet.........................ye sab lafz ......................in ke agaye bhi buahat kuch hoa karta hai reh e wafa mein ...............

.................apka dard raiygaan nahi hazrat , apki tehreeron mein usko mehsus kiya hai mein ne , apne dilse mehsus kiya hai ..........ho sake to yaqeen kijiye ga aur dil se vo khalish mita dijiye ga ke bas talkhi mehsus kee ap ki tehreron mein .....

bas itna hee ........

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Zeen persh nisaah bud neha budast

pevasta qalam bo nek ru bad farsudast

andar taqdeer ancah bayeed ba daad

gham khordan o kasheedan ma behudast

bohat achi si dost amra

kis ne kaha k mujhe ap se shikyat ho gai, ya phir ap ka wo sab likhna aur mita dena graan guzra

nahi esa koch nahoin hai

mujhe khushi hei k ap ne apne dil mei jo itna sab dba rkha tha wo kisi rh nikl gaya, aoer rayegan nahin gaya, mera yaqin kijiye

mein ne jawabn ye jo nazm tehrir ki, is mei ap ko mokhatib is liye kiya k ap ne wo batein mujhi se ki then

aor mei un ki wazahat ap he ko karna chahta tha, bakhuda dil dukhana maqsood na tha

na to ap dil dukhati hein, na ap ka diol esa wesa hei

ek bohgt muhabbat krne wala dil hei ap ka

darasl ap ne jsi trha se in tehriron ke mehsos kia us mei ap haq rakhti then usi shidat aor gehrai se un pe comment krne ki

main ab bhi kehta hon k koi shikyat nahi

bas jane anjane mein main ne dil dukha dioya ho to mazrat

han muhabbat mehz hijr, wisaal ka nam nahin, mera aik sher hei

khuley hon jis pe muhabat ke marhaley woh shakhs

wisaal o hijr ko kafi smajh nahi skta

lekin ishq bhi majboor hota hei.....kash mere zehn o dil ko is ki smajh aa jaye

ishq wehshi hoat hai, ishq junooni hoat hei,,,ishq ishq hota ye to janta tha mein

ishq majboriyon se samjhoite ka nam bhi hoat hai ye nahins majah aata mere dil ko

..............................

majboryon se inkar nahin...limits hoti hei her shakhs kio zindagi ki kuch...kbhi is se siwa demand nhi krna chahe hei joitna koi de ake...isi ka qayel hon...lekin ishq ki demands hopti hein kuch jo ins ab se bala tar hein..jo ese he smajh nhi a saktin jaise yeh majboryan koch dewanon ko smajh nahin aa kstin

mojhe aps e shikwa nahin, ap bhi mere lehje ki talkhi ko darguzar fr,maye ga

naqshipa

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bohat achi si dost amra

kis ne kaha k mujhe ap se shikyat ho gai, ya phir ap ka wo sab likhna aur mita dena graan guzra

nahi esa koch nahoin hai

mujhe khushi hei k ap ne apne dil mei jo itna sab dba rkha tha wo kisi rh nikl gaya, aoer rayegan nahin gaya, mera yaqin kijiye

mein ne jawabn ye jo nazm tehrir ki, is mei ap ko mokhatib is liye kiya k ap ne wo batein mujhi se ki then

aor mei un ki wazahat ap he ko karna chahta tha, bakhuda dil dukhana maqsood na tha

na to ap dil dukhati hein, na ap ka diol esa wesa hei

ek bohgt muhabbat krne wala dil hei ap ka

darasl ap ne jsi trha se in tehriron ke mehsos kia us mei ap haq rakhti then usi shidat aor gehrai se un pe comment krne ki

main ab bhi kehta hon k koi shikyat nahi

bas jane anjane mein main ne dil dukha dioya ho to mazrat

han muhabbat mehz hijr, wisaal ka nam nahin, mera aik sher hei

khuley hon jis pe muhabat ke marhaley woh shakhs

wisaal o hijr ko kafi smajh nahi skta

lekin ishq bhi majboor hota hei.....kash mere zehn o dil ko is ki smajh aa jaye

ishq wehshi hoat hai, ishq junooni hoat hei,,,ishq ishq hota ye to janta tha mein

ishq majboriyon se samjhoite ka nam bhi hoat hai ye nahins majah aata mere dil ko

..............................

majboryon se inkar nahin...limits hoti hei her shakhs kio zindagi ki kuch...kbhi is se siwa demand nhi krna chahe hei joitna koi de ake...isi ka qayel hon...lekin ishq ki demands hopti hein kuch jo ins ab se bala tar hein..jo ese he smajh nhi a saktin jaise yeh majboryan koch dewanon ko smajh nahin aa kstin

mojhe aps e shikwa nahin, ap bhi mere lehje ki talkhi ko darguzar fr,maye ga

naqshipa

Dilki wehshat kuch kam hoee is jaavab ko parh kar ,

bas itna hee gu ke haq nahi rakhtee magar ye keh ke zaroor jaoun gee ke ishq bilashuba majburi hei , uska ho jana ikhtiyari nahi aur kayanaat ki koi taqat isko dil se khatam nahi kara saktee , koi jabr koi zor koi zabardasti.........KOI NAHI KOI BHI NAHI KABHI BHI NAHI .......MAGAR

MAGAR

ishq ......ishq nahi agar vo tabahi laye

aspaas ki dunia mein aag laga ke sab ko bhasam kar ke kisi ko haacil kar lena ishq ki meraaj nahi , balke dil mein ghaou ki nacur ki soorat sab seh jana ke atraaf mein kuch na bigar paye yehee ishq ki meraaj yehe insaan ki meraaj ........

jo ishq barbaadi laye vo kuch bhi ho sakta hai ishq nahi .........

majburi raabta tor saktee hei jazbe ko nahi mita saktee.......

aur yun karne mein hausla chahyae bari himat chahyae ......................

kuch log zinda dargur ho ke umr bita dete hein , hur khushi khud pe haraam kar lete hein , akhri sans tak kisi ke ho jatae hein , koi taqat us jazbe ko nahi un ke dil se mehav kar skatee ....magar..............sad haif ke vo apne siwa kisi se is wafa ka zikar kar nahi sakte , ke ye zikr aise toofaan liye chala asaka hai k jo sab kuch fana kar jaye ........

"jan jaye ke rahe baat nibha dete hein":-)muskura dee ye parh ker , meri pasand ki ghazal ke sher ka misra hei ye magar baat bas apni jaan ki ho to kab ke luta de koi fana kar de magar jab apki jan se kuch aur jaanain muncalik hon jinki sanson ka daromadaar apki jaan pe ho to phir aisi hee majburiyaan pairon mein berhiyaan daal jatee hein .....

mei shayed phir buahat bol rahe hon

janae kiya kiya ander daba tha arsa e dara se ke aj yun ........

kaheen phir kuch ghalat na ho jaye kuch bura na bol don

ijazat dijiye ........

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Dilki wehshat kuch kam hoee is jaavab ko parh kar ,

bas itna hee gu ke haq nahi rakhtee magar ye keh ke zaroor jaoun gee ke ishq bilashuba majburi hei , uska ho jana ikhtiyari nahi aur kayanaat ki koi taqat isko dil se khatam nahi kara saktee , koi jabr koi zor koi zabardasti.........KOI NAHI KOI BHI NAHI KABHI BHI NAHI .......MAGAR

MAGAR

ishq ......ishq nahi agar vo tabahi laye

aspaas ki dunia mein aag laga ke sab ko bhasam kar ke kisi ko haacil kar lena ishq ki meraaj nahi , balke dil mein ghaou ki nacur ki soorat sab seh jana ke atraaf mein kuch na bigar paye yehee ishq ki meraaj yehe insaan ki meraaj ........

jo ishq barbaadi laye vo kuch bhi ho sakta hai ishq nahi .........

majburi raabta tor saktee hei jazbe ko nahi mita saktee.......

aur yun karne mein hausla chahyae bari himat chahyae ......................

kuch log zinda dargur ho ke umr bita dete hein , hur khushi khud pe haraam kar lete hein , akhri sans tak kisi ke ho jatae hein , koi taqat us jazbe ko nahi un ke dil se mehav kar skatee ....magar..............sad haif ke vo apne siwa kisi se is wafa ka zikar kar nahi sakte , ke ye zikr aise toofaan liye chala asaka hai k jo sab kuch fana kar jaye ........

"jan jaye ke rahe baat nibha dete hein":-)muskura dee ye parh ker , meri pasand ki ghazal ke sher ka misra hei ye magar baat bas apni jaan ki ho to kab ke luta de koi fana kar de magar jab apki jan se kuch aur jaanain muncalik hon jinki sanson ka daromadaar apki jaan pe ho to phir aisi hee majburiyaan pairon mein berhiyaan daal jatee hein .....

mei shayed phir buahat bol rahe hon

janae kiya kiya ander daba tha arsa e dara se ke aj yun ........

kaheen phir kuch ghalat na ho jaye kuch bura na bol don

ijazat dijiye ........

:)ap ne jo jo kaha, na ghlat keh skta hon, na jhutla skta hon

per...................

choriye per kya,,,kuch bhi nahin

dil halka kr lijiye....kisi ko ap se koi shikyta nhi...na ap kuch ghlat kr gayin

mujhe hamesha apni tehriron per ap ke tabrey aur ehsas ka intzra rhe ga k ye namukamal hon gi us ke baghair

khush rhen

naqshipa

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Jaanay kion yeh thread mujhe maazi ki yaad dilata hay....

Tu ne yeh kya ghazab kya mujh ko bhi faash ker dya

main hi tau ek raaz tha seena e kaenaat main

Salams

salam,

kia umda shair bheja hai ap nay. BOHAT KHOOB

dard-e-dil ka na koi rang hai na nasl--------na watan na zuban--------

aur na hi deen o mazhab!!!-----------kitna anokha wasta hai ye.

ws

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Dilki wehshat kuch kam hoee is jaavab ko parh kar ,

bas itna hee gu ke haq nahi rakhtee magar ye keh ke zaroor jaoun gee ke ishq bilashuba majburi hei , uska ho jana ikhtiyari nahi aur kayanaat ki koi taqat isko dil se khatam nahi kara saktee , koi jabr koi zor koi zabardasti.........KOI NAHI KOI BHI NAHI KABHI BHI NAHI .......MAGAR

MAGAR

ishq ......ishq nahi agar vo tabahi laye

jo ishq barbaadi laye vo kuch bhi ho sakta hai ishq nahi .........

sorry naqshipa ye tehreer ap kay liay hai. laikin ek shair yad aagaya amra ki bat per k

ISHQ PER ZOAR NAHI, HAI YE WO ATISH GHALIB

K LAGAYE NA LAGAY AUR BOJHAY NA BANAY

aur

ye kia keh diya amra ap nay k-----------ishq---------ishq nahi agar vo tabahi laye!!!

wo ishq hi kia jo tabahi NA machai!!!

dil ko rakh na kar de!!!

jism ko ghayal na kar de!!

aur

ruh ko be-sukoon na rakhay!!

hamain, ishq ki yehi ada tu achi lagti hai.

kisi kay ishq main giraftar rehna aur jonoon main khud ko barbad kar laina hi ishq hai hamry nazar main.

ab ap kia farmain gee es per janab?

ws

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sorry naqshipa ye tehreer ap kay liay hai. laikin ek shair yad aagaya amra ki bat per k

ISHQ PER ZOAR NAHI, HAI YE WO ATISH GHALIB

K LAGAYE NA LAGAY AUR BOJHAY NA BANAY

aur

ye kia keh diya amra ap nay k-----------ishq---------ishq nahi agar vo tabahi laye!!!

wo ishq hi kia jo tabahi NA machai!!!

dil ko rakh na kar de!!!

jism ko ghayal na kar de!!

aur

ruh ko be-sukoon na rakhay!!

hamain, ishq ki yehi ada tu achi lagti hai.

kisi kay ishq main giraftar rehna aur jonoon main khud ko barbad kar laina hi ishq hai hamry nazar main.

ab ap kia farmain gee es per janab?

ws

mohatarama apke sawal ke javab meinb auhat kcuh kehne ke lye magar bas ye do ashaar .............

khakay batool aur amra aap donon ki in posts ko parh ke jane kyon apni aik ghazal yad aa gai..

sunata chaloon.....

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khakay batool aur amra aap donon ki in posts ko parh ke jane kyon apni aik ghazal yad aa gai..

sunata chaloon.....

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SALAM,

"NAJANAY KIA KIA KIIYA HAI TUM NAY[ :unsure: ], YE KAR DE KHAO TU TUM KO MANAY "

bhi LAJAWAB, kia bat hai.

saree ghaza ek taraf aur ye eklota misra ek taraf!!!!!!!!!!!!!

bhi wah wah wah wah!!!

akhri shair bohat aala hai.

ws

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mohatarama apke sawal ke javab meinb auhat kcuh kehne ke lye magar bas ye do ashaar .............

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salam

bohat khoob,

aur agar hum, sharib ki ijazat say on ka paish kia hova ek shair yahan istaimal kar lain tu!!!

OSI NAY MUJH KO BATAYA K MERY HAD KIA HAI

wo jis kay wastay had say guzar gaya tha main

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