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A Tribute To My Fav Poetess Parveen Shakir

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Ash'ar tou khoob hain hee, Inteqaab ka bhi jawaab nahee..

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Amra, salaam

Good thread.

Actually I have been a great admirer of Parveen Shakir`s poetry. She is simply different and very candid in her appraoch.

I have just joined this forum ,so had not seen the thread fully because of paucity of time but will see soon.

If you wish , you may see my write up on Parveen Shakir at www.shvoong.com in the name Rizvi sharib. use [search].

Thanx.

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parveen shakir ke qalam se ata karda do shahkaar jo zaati taur pe meri pasand hein..

Faseel-e-shehar per thi zarb-e- kaari

Kamaa.n daaron ka shauq-e-sheharyaari

Kehan fankaar ko mar ke bhi haasil

Azaab-e-zindagi se rastgaari

Hujoom-e-rang mein bhi dil ka maslak

Kissi ahd-e-wafaa ki paasdaari

Uusi chehrey se auron ki parakh hai

Abhi tak hai wohi ik shakl pyaari

Wo khud jab tootne waala hu'a tha

Mein haari bhi to kaise waqt haari

Zamee.n Maa.n ki tarah hai her sitam per

Bas ik harf-e-du'aa honton se jaari

Kissi beemaar ki bai-yath mein roshan

Hamaari gardanon pe surkh dhaari

Aseer-e-Karbala jab yaad aa'en

Kehan lagti hai phir zanjeer bhaari !!

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Kis shehar mein la'ee khush kalaami

Dil Se-rabbi -o-rafeeq Shaami (Se-rabbi: belonging to Yasrab)

Sab Faiz ussi shafaq nazar ka

Kya cheez hai meri lala faami

Jo apne kamaal ki jazaa le

Kis kaam ki aisee nek naami ?

Sab ishq karen ge--aur sachcha

Hai apne qabeele mein ye khaami

Jazbat hi kuund hain to bekaar

Talwaar ki laakh be-nayaami

Aankhon se rawaan hai joo-e-khoo.n..per

Pehli si nahin subuk kharaami

Ye rasam to "Meer" se chali hai

Dil waalon ko dard ki salaami

Hum be-hunaron ki zee'st pal bhar

Iqbal ki zindagi...... Dawaami !!!

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Amra, salaam

Good thread.

Actually I have been a great admirer of Parveen Shakir`s poetry. She is simply different and very candid in her appraoch.

I have just joined this forum ,so had not seen the thread fully because of paucity of time but will see soon.

If you wish , you may see my write up on Parveen Shakir at www.shvoong.com in the name Rizvi sharib. use [search].

Thanx.

Thanx for this acknowledgment note sir,

Luv her too ,moreover I can relate to most of her writings n hence her writings penetrate deep inside me ,

I ll surely lookup ur writeup on her ,

:)

umeed hei bazm ki raahon mein kabhi kabhi mulaqat rahe gee

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Thanx for this acknowledgment note sir,

Luv her too ,moreover I can relate to most of her writings n hence her writings penetrate deep inside me ,

I ll surely lookup ur writeup on her ,

:)

umeed hei bazm ki raahon mein kabhi kabhi mulaqat rahe gee

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Salam ,

While going thru the thread you reminded me a very valuable and beautiful sher in your despatch.

"Aseer-e-Karbala jab yaad aa'en

Kehan lagti hai phir zanjeer bhaari !!"

This is a really wonderful sher and a very meaningful comment on Karbala....

All "ghum" become inferior once you look at Karbala.....

the above sher has nicely brought out this fact.....

Shukran

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Khushk aankhoun sae bhi ashkoun ki mehak aati hae

mae teray gham ko zamanay sae chupaoun kaisay!....

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Salam,

Parveen Shakir was very candid in expressing herself as woman.

The following two ashaar speak the ultimate superiority of males in the lives of female.

First sher sums up a sloace to the fidelty of the woman.

"Woh kahiin bhi gayaa lauta to mere paas aya,

Bas yahee baat hai achchi mere harjayee kee.

Second sher confirms, the "ana" or ego related with a woman when she is rejected

Kaise kah doon ke mujhe chor diya hai usne,

Baat to sach hai magar baat hai ruswaee kee"

wassalam

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Salam ,

Amra, can you post the following poems by Parveen Shakir :

1.Aankh Jab AAine se hatai,

Shyam Sunder se Radha mil aayee,

.................

.................

2.And Also one on Bibi Sakeena by her .....

Thanx.

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Salam ,

Amra, can you post the following poems by Parveen Shakir :

1.Aankh Jab AAine se hatai,

Shyam Sunder se Radha mil aayee,

.................

.................

2.And Also one on Bibi Sakeena by her .....

Thanx.

Adaab Shaarib ,

Hame afsoos hei ke ye to hamare pas nai hei aur ye pehlee tehreer to inki bauhat hee pyaree aur hamaree pasand jaisi seem kar rahe hei

agar ap ko kaheen se mile to zaroor ata kijiye ga

hamae shidat se intazar rahae ga

Lijiye kuch aur tehreerain hamaree pasandeeda shayera kee

shayed ke apke dilko bhi bhayen yeh

:-)

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Amra , salam-e masnoon.

Very shortly I shall post those ones { AAnkh jab ....}as much as I have in my mind.

Two ashaar ,one rom each ghazal, attracted me more than other ashaar:

JAB TAK WOH BE NISHAAN RAHA DASTARAS MEIN THA,

KHUSHNAAM HO GAYA TO HAMARA NAHIN RAHA.

AND:

PHOOLON KA BIKHARNA TO MUQADDAR HI THA LEKIN ,

kuch isme hawaaon kee sisyasat bhi bahot thee.

Thanx

Wassalam

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Saam , Amra....

Here is what I remember from that poem:

Ankh jab Aaiene se hatayee,

Shyam sunder se radha mil aayee,

Aye sapno-n mein Gokul ke Raja,

Dene sakhiyon ko aayee badha-i.

Saar-e Sur ek murli keee dhun mein ,

Aisee rachna bhala kisn-e gayee,

Gopiyoon se bhee khelein Kanahiya

aur ham se bhee meethi ladaee

Koyee khushboo to achchee lage-gee,

phool bhar bhar ke daman mein layee

Main-en sakhiyon ko kab kuch bataya

bairee payal ne hee ja lagayee

Sham Ghanshyam raste hee bhoole

radha pyarri to sudhi bhool aaee

Hath phoolon se pahle bandhe theeiy

ya ke gajrey se phooti kalaa-e

I shall be adding , if it comes to my mind...

wassalam

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Saam , Amra....

Here is what I remember from that poem:

Ankh jab Aaiene se hatayee,

Shyam sunder se radha mil aayee,

Aye sapno-n mein Gokul ke Raja,

Dene sakhiyon ko aayee badha-i.

Saar-e Sur ek murli keee dhun mein ,

Aisee rachna bhala kisn-e gayee,

Gopiyoon se bhee khelein Kanahiya

aur ham se bhee meethi ladaee

Koyee khushboo to achchee lage-gee,

phool bhar bhar ke daman mein layee

Main-en sakhiyon ko kab kuch bataya

bairee payal ne hee ja lagayee

Sham Ghanshyam raste hee bhoole

radha pyarri to sudhi bhool aaee

Hath phoolon se pahle bandhe theeiy

ya ke gajrey se phooti kalaa-e

I shall be adding , if it comes to my mind...

wassalam

This is absolutely amazing piece of poetry

Don t know why but it took me in a trance for sometime ,

Kabhi kabhi hum bhi kuch tukbandi karne ki ghalati karte hein ,

akcar to urdu mein hotee hei ye tukbandi magar kabhi kabhi hindi mein kehne ki koshish karte hien gu ke iska koi tajurba nahi hamae

janae kyun apni likhee eik bauhat arzaan see kavita yaad agayee socha yahan jasarat karen is adnaa tehreer ko hazir karne ki ..........

khaamiyon ko ignore kar dijiye ga ke hum aur hamaree tehreeron ki koi wuqat nahi ,

haazir hei hamare qalam se eik haqeer kavish.....

.................

SAJNA

Tore nainon ki chanchata chehre

tori bataiyan jiyaa dharkayen sajna

pichle pehar purwa keewaar jo khatkaye

tori yaad ka jhonka sang laaye sajna

Badli chahye bijuriya karaktee jaye

larze man tan ki dali simtee jaye sajna

rimjhim barkha barastee jaiye sajna

banwara man machle zid pe arh jaye

pal bhar ko chaamatkaar ho jaye sajna

palken mond beth rahe tori prem devani

jo nain kholon samne tora duaar ho sajna

choti see kut'tiya ho behti nadiyaa ho

tori sangat ho banhon ka hicaar ho sajna

kuch aur na mange banwra man mora

bas yehee haarsinghaar ho sajna

chup jayen beri dunia se kaaya hamri

Yun beth rahe tore charnon ma dasi tumri

chota sa apna ghar sansaar ho sajna

kuch na soojhe aur hame

bas piyar he piyar ho sajna ...........

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Amra,

A beautiful effort I must say. Particularly, there is no mistake in using Hindi terms.

In fact one cannot have masterly interaction with Urdu or Hindi until one knows both the languages.

The best example is that of Premchand who was dextrous in using both the languages and thus became a powerful writer.

Even Parveen Shakir who was born and brought up in Pakistan and who had no formal knowledge of Hindu Mythology had used the mythological symbols very nicely in her poem.

She was a great poetess without doubt.

wassalam

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Adaab Sharib,

Acha lagta hai jab koi lafzon kee dehlez paar kar ke ehsas ke angan tak jaa pohanche aur jazbon ke moti nazmon kee seeep se chun leta hei

Aise hee qaari mehsus hoay aap hamae

YES ! for some parveen shakir may be a trivial poetess who talked about stuff that does nt matter to most people in this world but for someone like me all that matter are the little things inl ife . Chote chote lamhe jo sadiyon pe moheet hote hein , maamooli se jazbe jo zindagi ko worthwhile bana dete hein

I luv this poetess and her school of thought .

I ve often been inspired by her in my writings .However me an d my efforts are nothing but a way of catharsis or watever .Urdu has never been my first language althuogh i am a UPITE but have neverl ived in pak and have alwayz been abraod all my life and st udied in convents but urdu and the eastern c ulture I guess wz alwayz a part of me by default...

Here is another gem from Parveen shakir

Kitni khubsoorti se yahan unhon ne lamhon ka zikr kiya hai jinki mehak isi bhi phul se barh ke mehka jatee hei ehsass ko

aisi hee iek nazm gajron pe mein ne bhi likhee thee kuch baras pehle ........vo adnaa kaavish bhi apke hazur rakh rahe hon , is lye nahi ke aap daad se navazain balke is lye ke iske ehsas ko mehssus karne ki salahiyat shayed hur hasas dil rakhta ho

Zar o javahar bhi bekaar sheh ho jate hein agar jo un mein pyar na ghula ho aur gajre jaisi cheez bhi kundan ban jatee hei agar jo chhahat ki bhati usko qeemtee kar de .......ishee ehsas ko lafzon mein pirone ki koshsih ki thee mein ne

Hazir hei pehle parveen shakir ki eik nazm jo dilke buahat qareeb hei mere

aur phir meri eik tuk bandi ..............

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Aur ab meri eik haqeer kaavish....

ajj meri maasi ki naubihata

salaam karnae ghar chalee ayee.

haseen s chehre pe bara roop

charha tha,

adhkhulee ankhon ka nasha

kuch aur barhaa tha ,

mehkae se wajud men uske

koi toofaan jaise aan ruka tha.....

kisi shokh lamhe ki yaadgaar

labon pe tharthara rahee thee,

betarteeb see dharkan dhaani

anchal men lehraa rahee thee,

afshaan bikhree zulf men

shabe vasl ki dastaan sunaa rahee thee.

mehndi rache haath chipaye

kharee thee,

koi beshqeemat lamha nazr e bad se

bachayae kharee thee.....

mein ne poocha "kya chipa rahee ho"

nigaahen jhuka ke bas itna he kaha

"Ussne kal bare pyar se mera hath

thama tha ,

choom ke meri hatheli motiye ka

ye gajra bandhan ki soorat bandha tha,

murjhaa gaya hai ye magar ,

mehak utar gayee iskee mere man men,

dojahaan ki daulat paa lee iss bandhan men"

mein dheerae se muskura dee......

taader apne heeron ke qeemtee

kangan ko dekha kya mein ne ,

num palkon se jaanae kya kya

socha kya mein nae ,

uskae murjhyaae gajrae men mujhe

dojaahan ki daulat pinhaan lagee

najanae kyun magar heeron ki

qeemtee woh choree apnee

kalayee men mujhe baree arzaan lagee.......

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naqshipa,

Chcha Ghalib had told this line which befits on you and Amra both.

"ZIKR US PAREE WISH KA AUR PHIR BAYAAN APNA"..

You both send Khobsoorat Ghazal in Khoobsoorat andaz.....

IT GIVES PLEASURE WHILE READING.

wassalam

Amra,

you were good in your second so callled "tukbandi" also .

What we call tukbandi in Urdu Shaeri as modesty..is considered as "hunar" in Hindi Shayari.

Tukbandi is virtuous in Hindi poetry and you are using HINDI WORDS...

wassalam

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naqshipa,

Chcha Ghalib had told this line which befits on you and Amra both.

"ZIKR US PAREE WISH KA AUR PHIR BAYAAN APNA"..

You both send Khobsoorat Ghazal in Khoobsoorat andaz.....

IT GIVES PLEASURE WHILE READING.

wassalam

thnx dear sharib :)

here is another from me;

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naqshipa,

Chcha Ghalib had told this line which befits on you and Amra both.

"ZIKR US PAREE WISH KA AUR PHIR BAYAAN APNA"..

You both send Khobsoorat Ghazal in Khoobsoorat andaz.....

IT GIVES PLEASURE WHILE READING.

wassalam

Amra,

you were good in your second so callled "tukbandi" also .

What we call tukbandi in Urdu Shaeri as modesty..is considered as "hunar" in Hindi Shayari.

Tukbandi is virtuous in Hindi poetry and you are using HINDI WORDS...

wassalam

:-)

Dheere se muskura diye hum ap ke baat sun kar

kiya kaha jayae

bas ita hee ke ap ne hamare haqeer lafzon mein pinaahaan qeemtee jazbon ko mehsus kar lya yehe bais e sakun hamare liye

Husn e nazar apka , ap jaise bazouq afraad ke sath sher o sukhan ke raah pe mulaqat kar ke lutf aaraha hei

umeed hei ,bashart e zindagi , bazm mein mulaqat hotee rahe gee .

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Salam

Kuch aur Parveen Shakir kee zubaan se:

Khud phool ne bhi apne kiye hont neem waa,

Chori tamam rang kee titli ke sar na jaaye

Ek doosra sher bhi dekhyie:

Rakh apne paas apne maho mehr ai falak,

Ham khud kisee kee aankh ke taare hain dino.

MAZEED:

Is ishq ne hamein hee nahin mua-tadil kiyaa,

uskee bhi khush mizaajee ke charche hain in dinoon

WASSALAM

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