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Mazaaq thaa

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Mazaaq thaa

:) so tou hum samjh hee gaye the ke ye mazaq hei

Ita to mazaq samjh ahee jata hei :P

magar ye mazaq buahat seriously hur jagha ho raha hei ajkal......... najanae kaise log aise kar pate hein ,

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B'zaahir hamaaray hee jaisey

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Hamm jou tareek raahoun mein maaray gaye

One of Faiz's best

Aaj kee shabb dite jalaayein, oonchee rakhein law

Yes exactly. Nazm ka naam bhool betha tha yaad dilanay ka shukriyah. Ye aur sar-e-wadi sina 'kisi daur main' zabani yaad theen. Burhapa aa raha hai sha'yed.

Edited by Jibran Haider

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dil hee to hai na sang-o-Khisht dard se bhar na aaye kyuN

roenge hum hazaar baar koi hamen sataaye kyuN

qaid-e-hayaat-o-band-e-Gham asl men dono eik hain

maut se pehle admi Gham se nijaat paaye kyuN

laikin. . .

. . .Ab sadiyon ke iqraar-e-ata'at ko badalnay

lazim hai ke inkaar ka farmaan koi utray

Apka intakhaab, buhat khubsoorat hai Amra.

Rab khush rakhay.

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Zard roo hai barg khayaalon ke

ay shab-e-firaaq kuch siyaahi de

Naisr Kazmi

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laikin. . .

. . .Ab sadiyon ke iqraar-e-ata'at ko badalnay

lazim hai ke inkaar ka farmaan koi utray

rahi na taaqat-e-guftaar aur agar ho bhi

to kis ummeed pe kahiye ke arzu kya hai

Apka intakhaab, buhat khubsoorat hai Amra.

Rab khush rakhay.

apke husn e nazar ka kamal hei sab ..................sher parhna aur samjhna alag baatain hoa kartee hein .......................aap jaise afraad shayed samjhte bhi hein mehaz parhte nahi hien ..........

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Burhapa aa raha hai sha'yed.

[b][/b]ya shayed ,Jibran ,Yun hoa apke sath ke .............

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^ in our city this situation is described like ' Chootee si Umur mein Lug Gaya Roog, Kahtay hein Loog Kah mein Mar Jaooon gi ' -- isn't that even more classic?? :D

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ya shayed ,Jibran ,Yun hoa apke sath ke .............

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Aye, you know it Amra. Don't you? :)

^ in our city this situation is described like ' Chootee si Umur mein Lug Gaya Roog, Kahtay hein Loog Kah mein Mar Jaooon gi ' -- isn't that even more classic?? :D

Sayanay kehtay hain sanjeedgi ke waqt sanjeedgi aur mazaaq ke waqt mazaaq karna chahiye. Aur jo har waqt mazaaq karta rahay, ussay bhaand kehtay hain. Tera qusoor nahin hain waisay. Tu Lahore bred hai. :angry:

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(salam)

Mayree aik taazeh nazm

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Mayree aik taazeh nazm

Çá ˜Êøÿ

æÀ Ïæ ŠÇäæŸ À áÊÿ ÀیŸ

ÇäÓÇäی ÎæÑǘ ˜ªÇÊÿ ÀیŸ

ÇäÓÇäی ÈæáیÇŸ ÈæáÊÿ ÀیŸ

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ÇäÓÇä Óä̪ÿ ÌÇÊÿÇÀیŸ

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ÇäÓÇä Óã̪ÿ ÌÇÊÿ ÀیŸ

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OH GOSH MY GOD !!!

Sach a hard hitting poem?!

Nothing but sheer stark reality !

Penetrated into my soul just like the scorching sun rays thurst themselves into one s open pores unavoidably

I luved the IN UR FACE tones of this creation of urs ,

Luv it !

Bauahat talkh haqeeqat bare karwe lehje mein keh dee gayee ho jaise ............

Jaise aatishfishaan sadiyon purana yuklakht phat para ho , jaise lafz laave ki shakl mein ubal pare hon ,

Insaan ka batareen roop !

acha hee hoa ke aap ne KUTTE ke sath PAGAL ka izafa kar dya .......:-)

kyunke kutte to bare wafadaar janvar hoa karte hien , umr bhar sath nibhate hein , kabhi apnon ko nuqsaan tou kiya pohanchana un apnon ke agayae awaz bhi nahi buland karte ,

Haan magar jab ye kutte PAGAL ho jate hein to insaanon jaisa ............ZAALIM HEVANON SE BATAR INSANON jaisa roop dhaar lete hien ,

kiya apne kiya paraye , kisi ko nahi chorte , cheer phaar dete hien ...........

Insaanon ke is jungle mein aise aise hevanon se saabqa para hei ke ab to dil hee jaise seham ke reh gaya hei ........Is insaanon ki bheer mein koi ADMI dikhayee hee nahi deta dur dur talak.........

Apke lafz sans lete hein ................pehle bhi keh chuki hon phir keh rahee hon ............

Jaise ruh phunk detee hien ap lafzon ke bejaan badan mein ........jab chahae vo chingari ban ke sulag uthte hein jab ap ka dil kare ap un chingariyon mein kaliyaan chatkaa detee hein aur phir yuklakht unhee lafzon mein shole dehak uthe hien .........

Is nazm ko parh kar ..........najne kyun Faiz sahab ki nazm ka ye hicc'ca yaad agaya ,

unginat sadiyon ke taareek baheemaana talism

resham o qatlas o kamkhaab mein bunwaye hoay

jabajaa bikte hoay koocha o baazaar mein jism

khaakh mein lithre hoay khoon mein nehlaye hoay

laut jaatee hei udhar ko bhi nazar kiya kijiye

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aur bhi dukh hein zamanae mein mohabbat ke siwa

raahaatain aur bhi vasl ki raahat ke siwa

Is bakamal nazm ke huzur daad hazir hei,

aur itaaa sara wala pyar bhi :-)

ke nazm ka mahol batla raha hai ke aag ka dariyaa paar kar ke bhasm hoee ruh lye jale jhulse hathon se ye nazm wajud mein ayee hei ........Ji chhaaha is uljhe bikhre ghaiz o ghazab mein biphre hoay soch ke samandar pe dheme se lehje ka pyar ka baandh baandh diya jaye ke kuch thehraou ajaye , kuch thehar jayae kuch pursakun ho jaye ye samandar jiski maujon ki tughiyaani apne uruj pe hei,

Rab se dua ke sada pursakun rahain aap

aur reh e zeest mein INSANON se mulaqat ho apki .........

aise insaan jo apke jaise dil aur zehan rakhne wale shakhs ki qadr kar sakain

sada anchal bhara rahe khushiyon se apka,

Amra

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Ahsan!

Chand tajaaveez haazir hain:

Nazm main mazeed 'shay'eri' bhariye. Kuch tash'bihaat, chand tamaaseel aur ghaliban nayee taraakeeb bhi.

'Khoon chaatna'. . .kuch naa-maanoos nahin? shay'ed 'khoon peena', 'khoon choosna', 'khoon karna' wagheram?

Aap ne pehlay band main 'seegha jama ghay'eb' [wo] iste'maal kiya. Agar doosray band ke pehlay misray main 'un kee' parrha jaye nah ke 'in kee' tab bhi aap ne teesray band main seegha badal kar 'jama haazir' [ye] kar diya hai. Kya takneekee a'itebaar se aisa karna durust hoga?

Insaani kuttay?

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Rulaa diya tumm nay.

Yehee nazm, angresee mein bhee hai, zara mukhtalif shakal mein, Poetry Forum mein, RABID DOGS kay naam say.

Yahaan Urdu form mein hamm nay eik zamaanay mein Faiz Sahab, Saahir peh individual thread bhee banaye thay. Jis nazl kaa aik bandh tumm nay quote kiya, woh urdu script mein mukammal wahaan post huee huee hai

Tafseeli jawaab doon gee, dil zara theher jaaye

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Rulaa diya tumm nay.

Tafseeli jawaab doon gee, dil zara theher jaaye

Araay rone wone ki koi nai ho rahee ji ,

aise koi nai karta

jaldiiiiiiiiiiiiiii se ye bheegee palken dry clean kijiye :-)

aur muskura dijiye

jaldiiiiiiiiiiiiii seeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :-)

Dekhiye apko eik cheez parhwate hein hum ,

Hamaree gu ke ye buahat hee adnaa see kavish hei , hamae likhna wikhna nai ata bilkul bhi ........bas magar kabhi kabhi palkon se dhale ansu , kabhi dilki betarteeb dharkanain kabhi dard ke sagaar yunhee lafzon ka roop dhaar lete hein ,

aise hee dilki kuch dharkanon ki dastaan raqam ki thee kabhi hum ne is choti see aam see buahat arzaan see tukbandi mein ..........

bas socha apka dil acha acha ho jaye , mood badal jaye aur ap muskura den

so isko apki nazar kar rahe hein :-)

Achi lage na lage apko pur apka dil thehar bhi jaye ga aur ap isko parh ke achi ahci ho jayen ge i know it ,

waise

ho sakta hai dil thehre na balke dharaknae lage isko parh kar hahahahaa

Lijye

Is umeed pe ke apka udaas dil acha sa ho jaye ga .............

A feeble attempt on my part !

IQRAR E MOHABBAT

kalyee mein soya kangan

shor machayae khankhan,

paoun ki payal barson se

ghumsum gumsum,

nach uthi rumjhum rumjhum.

labon pe tha hayah ka talaa

nutkhat aisa mere

kaan ka bala....

bol gaya!

chipa ke rakha piya jee se

raaz......

woh khol gaya !

piyar tou hai sajan jee

pur kehtae kehtae

Dil hamara dol gaya ........

:blush: :)

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Waah! Khaalis "mashriqee" naar, jou Mayn kabhee naa bann payee, waisey Mayray aqeeday mein hayaa peh sirf mashriqee naaryoun kee ijarehdaaree naheen hai

Nazm, bohat pyaari lagee, pyaaree hee iss kay sabbsay mauzoon lafz laga; iss mein jo nazkat hai [pyaar mein] wahee nazm kee nazkat say kuchch insaaf karr sakktee hai

By the way, Mayray Mian kehtay hain, motee motee aankhein ansooun say dhulee huee bohat mann mohnee laggtee hain

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Waah! Khaalis "mashriqee" naar, jou Mayn kabhee naa bann payee, waisey Mayray aqeeday mein hayaa peh sirf mashriqee naaryoun kee ijarehdaaree naheen hai

Nazm, bohat pyaari lagee, pyaaree hee iss kay sabbsay mauzoon lafz laga; iss mein jo nazkat hai [pyaar mein] wahee nazm kee nazkat say kuchch insaaf karr sakktee hai

mmmmmmmmm .............

Thanx hazaroun gulistan ..............

aur kya kahain nai pata .......... :) :blush:

By the way, Mayray Mian kehtay hain, motee motee aankhein ansooun say dhulee huee bohat mann mohnee laggtee hain

chaliye ishee baat pe ansoun ke liye eik sher suniye ..........

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Haye baychaarey jawaan marg . . .

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^^ Very Nice, Great Selection

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Ahsan!

Chand tajaaveez haazir hain:

Nazm main mazeed 'shay'eri' bhariye. Kuch tash'bihaat, chand tamaaseel aur ghaliban nayee taraakeeb bhi.

'Khoon chaatna'. . .kuch naa-maanoos nahin? shay'ed 'khoon peena', 'khoon choosna', 'khoon karna' wagheram?

Aap ne pehlay band main 'seegha jama ghay'eb' [wo] iste'maal kiya. Agar doosray band ke pehlay misray main 'un kee' parrha jaye nah ke 'in kee' tab bhi aap ne teesray band main seegha badal kar 'jama haazir' [ye] kar diya hai. Kya takneekee a'itebaar se aisa karna durust hoga?

Insaani kuttay?

wow, you're Urdu Grammer is very nice Mashallah.

Edited by Jaf

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Hi folks,

I am not a very qualified poet, However every now and then i do write short poems or like that stuff. here is one of them, you might like that ... !!! I am relatively a very polite poet :D i rarely use harsh words, yet they are even louder.

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by: Jaf

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iss marhale ko mout bhi kehte hain dosto

ek pul main toot jaye jahan umr bhar ka sath

Bauahat puracar sher ...........sach hee kaaha shayer ne ,

apka ata kiya sher parhte hoay eik sher yaad agaya socha haazir karte chalain.......

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Mohtaram hazrat , hamae apka signature mein likha hoa sher bhi buahat pasand aya ,

buahat mukhtacar magar mufacal baat kahe hei is mein bhi shayer ne ......

Due Respects,

Syeda Amra Hyder

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^^ Sister Amra, i have not seen such 'a piece of urdu art' that i find in your posts in ages. I sincerely admire it, even your urdu writing skills are exceptional, would you please elaborate, how did you learn that, and what is your age? i meant you seem someone who is in her early 20' or like that but writing skills definitely are 'marvelous' - your each and every post worth reading, since you're a newbie here, i thought you were just copying/pasting those artistic poetry, however i now observed your each and every post including your own remarks the choice of words is no way near to the common person's choice of words, just like me :)

Keep posting good stuff, and it's all out of the goodness of my heart and nothing else ;)

and never mind my stupid and silly jokes, i am 'made' this way --- i merely try to people laugh and in return i do appreciate when they make fun of me., Hope you did not mind it.

Your posts are really getting this thread to new heights!!! -

regards/JAF aka Jafri :!!!:

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Adaab arz hei Jafri sahab ,

sab se pehle tou behud shukriya ke hum jo kehte hien jaise kehte hein jo ashaar muntakhib karte hien vo apko pasand ate hein ,wajhe shayed ye hei ke vo ashaar hote hee aise hein ke naapasand karne ka sawal he nahi , Daad shayer ka haq hei na ke hamara....

Hum to sada bahar ke mumalik mein rahae hein aur urdu as a subject nahi parha kabhi magar urdu speaking hone ki bina pe aur phir ama baba ki dant dapat ne aur shayeri ke shouq ne aur mazhabi kutub ka mutaleah karne ke shouq ne kuch urdu sikha dee......

Kuch nazmain kuch ashaar kuch afsaanae kuch short stories bhi likhte hien , poetry angrezi urdu aur hindi mein karne ki koshish karte hien jniko bas tukbandi hee kaha ja sakta hei ,

Beharkaif ap ne apne qeemtee waqt mein se kuch yahan ye sab daad dene ke lye sarf kiya......... shukriya ,

As far as ur frank n happy go lucky nature is concerend , that s YOU and no one has the right to comment on it , Its ur life and ur way of handling it ,

Hum zaati taur pe ajnabiyon se eik dum nazdeek nahi ho pate na hona pasand karte hien , aur jab tak kisi se achee tarha se jaan pehchan na ho jaye na us se mazaq karna pasand karte hien , achi ho ya buri ho magar yehee hamaree nature hei ........That s ME .....just a trivial me :-) !

Thanx hazaroun gulistan for all ur wordz here that u bestowed upon my posts.

Bazm ki raahon mein , sher o sukhan ke kisi mor pe umeed hei ap se ache ashaar ke sath mulaqat ho gee .....aisi umeed rakhte hien ...........

With all my Due Respects

:)

Syeda Amra Hyder

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^^ Adaab aur Nawzish kah app naay Jis Shaista undaaz mein jawab diya,

May be you have not been through the Shiachatters Interviews thread and in one of the posts i actually confessed all of my bad habits :D and what you indicated is one of them, noone is prefect :) ... Khair !!! aur App ka bhi Bohat Bohat Shukriya,

waslam

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