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A Love Beyond....

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(Shyly dedicated to that elusive force that prodded me to write)

A Love Beyond…

Two souls drifting

In an unearthly abode

Of nothingness.

Untouched by light or darkness

Neither sound, nor silence.

Devotion lovingly crafted by the Divine.

Soon enough, she feels a gentle pull

Of the tether around her ankle.

A reluctant reminder of reality.

They bid a heavy farewell

Eyes averted

Fingertips barely touching.

She glides downwards

Falls into a slump of despair

Rage, guilt.

Raindrops caress her shoulders.

As she faces upwards

They wet her lips.

A familiar salty taste.

Tears from heaven.

It was

Is

Ever will be

A Love Beyond…

This Life.

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Muskaan, could you please do me a favor? i try my best to understand the inner meaning of the poem, but still fail..i can only sense sadness in the atmosphere by reading the last paragraph of the poem.. oh, what is it about actually? is the poem reflecting the situation where two souls need to separate from each other, oh why as if i'm the only one who fail to understand the meaning of this poem, oh my, i'm sorry terribly for my incapacity...

siti

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Just beautiful, like a fantasy... especially like the end:

Raindrops caress her shoulders.

As she faces upwards

They wet her lips.

A familiar salty taste.

you can feel the sadness from her being in this position.

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Thank you all for your comments. It is not in my nature to write about such a theme. In fact its not even in my nature to write at all. So I appreciate your comments more than I can express.

Just beautiful, like a fantasy... especially like the end:

Raindrops caress her shoulders.

As she faces upwards

They wet her lips.

A familiar salty taste.

you can feel the sadness from her being in this position.

Actually the poem came to me in a totally unexpected but strong visual form. And I really wanted to put the beautiful effect of the movements across. The flow from up above, her looking down towards her ankle, the farewell, the gliding down to earth and back to her looking up. I am so happy that you are able to sort of "visualise" this.

siti an in-depth analysis will take me even further away from myself. But I very much identify with your need to know what the writer meant to say. So here's an overview:

She unintentionally becomes a part of a beautiful, pure and eternal relationship that belongs only in heaven.

She savors it for a while.

Remembering her constraints and not wanting to taint the relationship, she makes the painful decision to return it to its rightful place.

Her courage and agony moves the heavens to tears.

If you can feel her pain, her helplessness, imagine her strength...perhaps you may even shed a tear for her...

as i am doing so...right now...

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