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[pinkyaliya]

When they (la) killed Abbas, they severed the love between Abbas and Hussain.

I'm going to try something new...I'm going to start a poem and you guys will continue it. InshaAllah, this will actually work and I won't be stranded here writing this poem myself!

I asked for the love between Abbas and Hussain.

I asked the sky,
Why all the rain? Who makes you cry?
The sky answered me, Abbas and Hussain.  For the severed love between these two is now a broken tie.

I asked the ground,
Why all the earthquakes? Who makes your heart pound?
The ground answered me, Abbas and Hussain.   For the severed love between these two, I make a huge sound.

I asked the seas,
Why all the tsunamis? Why do you keep making people fall to their knees?
The seas answered me, Abbas and Hussain.   For the severed love between these two, I will make this huge breeze.  

I asked the clouds,
Why all the storms? Why over the sun do you put a shroud?
The clouds answered me, Abbas and Hussain.  For the severed love between these two, the sun's light I have disallowed.

I asked the sun's rays,
Why global warming? Why is it so hot in May?
The sun's rays answered me, Abbas and Hussain.  For the severed love between these two, we are oppressed each day.

I asked the grass,
Why do you burn? Who turned you into a carcass?
The grass answered me, Abbas and Hussain. For the severed love between these two, are we are just a dead mass.


Add in your own lines...

Edited by pinkyaliya, 21 May 2012 - 09:37 PM.

[lover of Mola]

(I try my best hope it works )

I asked the loyalty,

Why do you not exit now? Who turned you into a disloyalty?

The loyalty answered me, Abbas(a.s) and Hussain(a.s). For the severed love between these two, i am finished after karbala.

[Shia_Debater]

I asked the wind,

Why do you make so much noise? Why does it sound like you are moaning?

The wind answered me, Abbas and Hussain. For the severed love between these two, I am mourning.

I asked the water

Why do you poison - if consumed for some time without falter?

The water answered me, Abbas and Hussain. For the severed love between these two, for me Abbas was slaughtered.

[pinkyaliya]

I asked my heart,

WHY DO YOU PAIN? For who do you wish to part?

My heart answered me, for Abbas and Hussain. For the severed love between these two...JUST RIP ME OUT!

Edited by pinkyaliya, 21 May 2012 - 11:05 PM.

[Shia_Debater]

[Allahuakbar]

MashaAllah, you have incorporated wonderful ideas (though heart breaking) into the poem. However, I don't think anything or anyone can "severe" the love between Abbas and Imam Hussain .

[Allahuakbar]

 pinkyaliya, on 22 May 2012 - 01:02 AM, said:

Yes. I was actually thinking about that when I was firstly writing the poem. Their love is eternal and too strong to be severed.
But i couldn't think of a word that was short and described their broken hearts other than "love"
Am I making sense? When they killed Abbas, they broke Imam Hussain's heart and broke his "love".
Can you think of a word and we'll replace "love" with it?

I understand your dilemma. The word love sounds good as is if you don't think into it too much. It is difficul to sum up physical separation or physical bond/connection in a word and make it flow as you have done in your poem.

[Allahuakbar]

 pinkyaliya, on 22 May 2012 - 04:16 PM, said:

Forgot to post a piece of art. This is obviously a sketch!

The blessed land that Imam Hussain is buried in is a piece of Heaven and on the Day of Judgement, that piece of land will rise to the sky; the dust will brush off and reveal a sparkling land.

http://alajalmahdi.b...of-karbala.html

MashaAllah wonderful text matching a beautiful sketch. You are an artist in every regard!