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[saba fatima naqvi]

Aaj dil khol ke roye hain to yoon khush hai Faraz
Chand lamhoon ki yeh raahat bhi badi ho jaise

[khuram]

shhhhhhhhh

khamosh ay dil,  bhari mehfil may chilana nahi acha

adab pehla qarena hay mohabat k qareno may

[khuram]

kahan dil qayd say chota hua hay
abhi tak shehr say rotha hua hay
ham kayasy kahain es dil ko sacha
hamaray samnay jhoota hua hay

[khuram]

jiski surat o serat say ho ghafil khuram
ajnabi shkhs ko q dil may basa rakha hay

experts plz make the corrections if needed

[khuram]

2nd line sounds better in this way

us ajnabi shkhs ko q dil may basa rakha hay

[khakay batool]

khuram, on 19 April 2010 - 02:17 PM, said:

jiski surat o serat say ho ghafil khuram
ajnabi shkhs ko q dil may basa rakha hay

experts plz make the corrections if needed

salam,

ab masAla hamari samajh mien aAgaya. ye jo aAp 'experts'  ko mukhatib ker rehey hain na es sey hamari zaban gung ho gaai hai. ho sakta hai ye hamara khayal ho aur asl wajha ye do words hon '' if needed''!!!



acha dosra micra bohat acha hai. pehley per zara aur mehnat karain

ws

khuram, on 19 April 2010 - 02:17 PM, said:

jiski surat o serat say ho ghafil khuram
ajnabi shkhs ko q dil may basa rakha hay

experts plz make the corrections if needed

es key barey mien kiya khayal hai aAp ka?

ÌÓ ˜æ Ïی˜ªÇ äÀ ãáÿ ÇõÓ Óÿ ãÍÈÊ ˜یÓی

ÇÌäÈی ÔÎÕ ˜æ ˜یæŸ Ïá ãیŸ ÈÓÇ Ñ˜ªÇ Àÿ

ye micra likh tu diya hai usi mafhoom mien jo aAp kehna chah rehey they laikin hamarey khayal mien aisa hota nahi hai.

ws

Edited by khakay batool, 20 April 2010 - 04:28 PM.

[khuram]

khakay batool, on 20 April 2010 - 04:33 PM, said:

salam,

ab masAla hamari samajh mien aAgaya. ye jo aAp 'experts'  ko mukhatib ker rehey hain na es sey hamari zaban gung ho gaai hai. ho sakta hai ye hamara khayal ho aur asl wajha ye do words hon '' if needed''!!!



acha dosra micra bohat acha hai. pehley per zara aur mehnat karain

ws

es key barey mien kiya khayal hai aAp ka?

ÌÓ ˜æ Ïی˜ªÇ äÀ ãáÿ ÇõÓ Óÿ ãÍÈÊ ˜یÓی
ÇÌäÈی ÔÎÕ ˜æ ˜یæŸ Ïá ãیŸ ÈÓÇ Ñ˜ªÇ Àÿ

ye micra likh tu diya hai usi mafhoom mien jo aAp kehna chah rehey they laikin hamarey khayal mien aisa hota nahi hai.

ws

salam, u have proved urself as an expert khair correction was needed in deed , 6 years say urdu nahi parhi mistakes to hongi na. but i dont agree with your last point q k kehtay hain k love to hota he blind n deaf hay n sometimes it has limb too   so its very possible , aapko kia pata baray baray pagal paray hain

or waysay bhi shairi may bhi innovation lani chaheay , ghisay pitay khayal or waqeat kab tak chalyngay ?

[khuram]

khakay batool, on 22 April 2010 - 07:28 AM, said:

salam,

hamari tuk bandi aAp ko achi lagi chalain bohat bohat shukriya.

gham na karen aur bas achi achi kitabain padhen, achey shu'ara  ko padheye.

love blind ho hi nahi sakta. jis jazbey ki baat aAp ker rehey hain, wo tu bas naDani hoti hai.


aapko kia pata baray baray pagal paray hain

   ho sakta hai na pata ho laikin hum aAp ki es baat sey 100% muttafiq hain!!


ghissey pittey khayal aur waqiayat ko aik naiye andaz sey bayan kerna hi shairi hai.  aAp esi terha likhtey rehey tu aik din hum aAp sey tas-hi kerwa rehey hon gain.

ws

its too expensive n hard to afford   at least for me

Edited by khuram, 22 April 2010 - 12:20 PM.

[khuram]

dil pagal hay ya NaEhl tumhara khuram
zara aik baar "lipid profile" kara kar daykho

experts , i dont need correction for this

Edited by khuram, 22 April 2010 - 12:38 PM.

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[Syed Demanding]

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[khuram]

dil may hota to nikal he jata
kia karain, he has sunk in me

plz dont correct

Edited by khuram, 29 April 2010 - 02:31 AM.

[MOHIB E AHLAYBAIT]

Dil cheez kiya hai app meir jaan leejiyay
Bus eik baar Omar ko bura man leejiyay

[SHAUZEB]

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˜À ÕÏ ãÿ ÇÈ ãÓáÓá Àæ ۓ ÀیŸ

[MOHIB E AHLAYBAIT]

Zainab kay loot jannay  ka, jiss dil mei ghum nahi....
Us dil pay kibriya ka, hota karam nahi.....

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[M.N.A.]

khakay batool, on 07 June 2011 - 01:47 PM, said:

GHARI GHARI NA EDHAR DEKHIYE KE DIL PE MUJHEY
HAI IKHTEYAAR,PER ITNA BHI IKHTEYAAR NAHI

wah"""

yeh dil to pagal hai ise pe ikhteyaar kahan???

[sharib]

zehn duniya kee haqueeqat ko samajhne pe musir

dil k bas khaabon kee bastee mein thikaana chah-e




wassalam

[sharib]

sharib, on 01 July 2011 - 12:28 PM, said:

zehn duniya kee haqueeqat ko samajhne pe musir

dil k bas khaabon kee bastee mein thikaana chah-e




wassalam

Apne halaat koee mujhko sunana chahe

aur woh ek baat jo mujh se hee chupana chahe



meri khwahish k teri yaad se ghafil na rahun

fikre duniya teri yaadon ko mitaana chahe

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kaun pahchane hai Sharib tujhe is waadee mein

bin ta-aaruf to koee yaan se na jaana chahe.




wassalam

[sharib]

teri batein hi sunane aaye
dost bhee dil hidukhaane aaye

kya kahin phir koee bastee ujdi
log kyun jashn mana-ne aaye

Faraz

[sharib]

deedani hai shikastagi dil kee
kya imaarat ghamon ne dhai hai

Mir Taqui Mir

[khakay batool]

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[sharib]

jaisa chaho sulook is-se karo
dil hamaara nahin tumhara hai

[khoram]

dil k armaa anso'oo may beh gaey
jo kehna tha un say , wo unki ammi se keh gaey

[lover of Mola]

kuch bhi na kaha aur keh bhi gaey
kuch kehte kehte reh bhi gaey